Hiya Jordan!
Right so I will just add now that I guess I'm kind of religious, but not with Christianity and I don't know much about Lucifer, however I shall try my best to give you my thoughts on this piece. I guess it's something that can be seen as quite controversial, so I totally commend you for that as it's quite gutsy to put something out there like this. I also think that the ideas you've put forward are interesting to say the least.
I think my main critique about this is how sure you are when you're writing this because the thing is, nobody is sure what has actually happened, and you're sort of writing this like they're 'duuhhh, obvious' when really nobody know. It's definitely important to take these sorts of things with an open mind and be honest about your views, but you can't just state these things happened without your evidence. Rather it's your interpretation of what happened.
Also, I don't really know what this is doing in the literary section as it looks like something that could be put in a place of debate. Considering it's here now, with these sorts of things you always have to remember to give a balanced view, taking into account different people's viewpoints rather than just your own.
The fallen angel. I'm not religious but I still think that the bible can teach us life lessons. For example like the story of Lucifer and Michael- basically how Michael is loyal to his leader (God) and how Lucifer was rebellious and wanted to choose his own path in life and did the choices he wanted despite the outcome. We humans represent Lucifer because we like to look at ourselves as rebels and like to do things our way no matter what others say. That's what Lucifer did because he wanted to be seen as someone that took a stand for what he believed in. I'm not saying to worship Lucifer or hate him because I don't even believe God. I'm just saying before you are quick to judge someone make sure you don't represent the thing you fear most....
I've made some corrections in bold here.
I don't think there's much more to say here, this certainly was an interesting piece and you definitely have some interesting viewpoints. Just remember to also try and show different people's viewpoints too next time. I like the last bit, as then that can sort of be linked to everyday life. Anyways, I hope this review helped, please PM me with any questions you have or if you'd like anything else to be reviewed.
Keep on writing!
-Arc x
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