Teachers Lounge - Chapter 1

by tronks

Published July 17, 2013

In Teachers Lounge (Novel)

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I heard slow and steady clacking, waking me from my daze. He was approaching now! The rumors about him filled my mind, and I shook my head to shed them away.

Clack, clack, clack.

His cane sounded against the tile and he had books under his free arm. His old face looked tired as I noticed it usually did. His grey eyes searched the area as he sensed me blocking his path.

"Hello, Mr. Thomas." I flashed my colleague a bright smile. "We haven't met before--I'm Ms. Norton, the music teacher."

He rolled his eyes. "Ah yes, you're fresh out of school aren't you? What do you want?"

Shocked, I bit my lip. "I--I was hoping to get your help with something."

Mr. Thomas said nothing, gazing past me. I continued. "During literature month we'll be doing a musical, and I wanted your help choosing the right novel."

He made no immediate movement, and he leaned slightly on his cane as if he were bored. "Sorry, no."

I gaped as he maneuvered around me, walking away. I caught up to his heel. "Wait, Mr. Thomas! I heard you wrote novels, so I thought--"

"You shouldn't believe everything you hear, girl."

"It's Ms. Norton, Mr. Thomas. Let's be professional, okay?"

"Scram."

His limp slowed him down so that no matter his pace, I matched it. We had almost reached his classroom when he halted and turned to face me. I could see him trying to meet eyes with mine, but he kept failing. Finally he met eyes with my nose and said "Listen here, girl. I don't like the teaching staff, let alone you. I'm here to do my job and go home."

"We don't have to be friends." I said. "I just need your help with the play."

He didn't reply and remained silent. I knew this was a bad idea! He wants nothing to do with my damned play. We stood by his empty classroom, but I didn't realize it until a student crossed our paths to enter.

I looked down; it was my soloist, Alyssa. The young girl held tightly to her backpack straps, gleaming upward at us. "Hi Ms. Norton!"

I smiled. Now was my chance to impress Mr. Thomas. "Hi, Alyssa. Are you excited to be a soloist for the play?"

She giggled. "I am. Is Mr. Thomas going to be in the play too?"

I scratched my head. If they were already acquainted then Alyssa wouldn't impress him. "Not exactly--I was trying to convince him to help out with it. Why don't you sing for him and show him what we're made of?" I nudged her gently and her grin didn't fade.

"Actually, that's okay. Mr. Thomas said he loves my singing already."

Curiously, I glanced at Mr. Thomas. His gaze felt almost absent. How had this cruel man acted so kind to her? He certaintly wasn't kind to me. Alyssa stepped towards Mr. Thomas, who was alerted by the sound alone. He stood a little straighter and Alyssa reached a hand up to his face. She waved her hand back and forth. "Mr. Thomas, how many fingers am I holding up?"

He blushed pink and said nothing. Alyssa glanced to me, eyes brimming with confusion.

"...I think he's legally blind now." I explained in a whisper. "Or so I heard..."

Stunned, Alyssa flung her arms around him. "Mr. Thomas, I'm so sorry! Last year you said your eyes were getting better!"

Mr. Thomas had turned redder now, patting the child gently on her head. "There's no need to worry about me." he said gruffly. "I'm okay without my eyesight. The doctor said I adapted well to my cane."

Mr. Thomas tapped his cane, but this didn't please Alyssa. Her heart may have well been broken on the floor. "But how you watch my play?"

"Don't worry; I can still hear your beatiful singing, at least."

"Are you going to help with the play then?"

He looked convinced and nodded slightly. Alyssa screamed happily, jumping around where Mr. Thomas stood. "Thank you, thank you, thank you! The play will be perfect with your help!"

I was surprised to hear Alyssa say that. I was the only one on the teaching staff that didn't view him in a negative manner, and I didn't expect a child to have a strong understanding of him when my colleagues didn't.

After saying goodbye, Alyssa scampered to class. I smiled ear to ear, turning to face Mr. Thomas. He was still red in the face.

"What?" he growled lowly. "You can be on your way now."

I couldn't stop smiling. "You must love your students if they make you melt like butter."

"I don't melt."

"You totally do!"

"It's not your business."

Accomplished, I stuffed my hands in my pockets. "Then I'll see you this Thursday for planning?"

"Whatever you say."

He shuffled into his class and I returned to mine, feeling hopeful for the school for the first time since I began teaching there.

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musicjoychild Review
musicjoychild wrote a review Review · Aug 25, 2013

I really enjoyed reading this! There's so many stories out there about the kids in high school, but not many stories for teens about the teachers and it's nice to read a change. Grammar and spelling is also nicely done. I love how Mr. Thomas seems like a grumpy man who has a mutual annoyance when the other teachers, but is incredibly sweet with the kids. I can't wait to see how Ms. Norton and Mr. Thomas come together to put on a play.

WritersCanDream77 wrote a review Review · Aug 5, 2013

I have to say, it's cool to read something from a teacher's point of view. Usually the story focuses on the people in the play, but this is focusing on people BEHIND the play. It's interesting. :)

I did not find any grammar mistakes, so yay for that! I like the way you arrange your dialogue in your sentences.

See...the grumpy old man always comes out as a softy. You've made us think he's just this mean old man who hates the world, but really he's got a soft spot for children. Kudos for the way you make the characters come to life! I love it!

I found myself wondering: Did he not want to help before because he's blind and he can't write anymore?

Alyssa is so cute. When you said:
The young girl held tightly to her backpack straps, gleaming upward at us. "Hi Ms. Norton!", I just immediately got an image of a little girl looking up at me with wide eyes and a mile-wide grin. Good job on that. :)

Good luck in the rest of the story! :)

~R

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OliveDreams
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OliveDreams wrote a review Review · Jul 28, 2013

Hello there! Here to review your work on this very fine Review day! I will review as I read otherwise I tend to ramble on and get my knickers in a twist. No one wants to read about all that.

I thought I would try something from the humor column!

I really liked this - it's sweet and endearing and not at all what I expected it to be. I really like the relationship that you've created between the two teachers. There's a lot of places that you could go with this!

The only critique that I could come up with is to maybe slow it down a little. By letting the readers know that he is legally blind so early on - I feel as though you're giving up your secrets too soon! I also think he could have held on a little longer to his stubborn ways before giving in and changing his mind about the play.

Good luck! I look forward to reading some more. HAPPY REVIEW DAY!

Olive <3

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Laminated
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Laminated wrote a review Review · Jul 19, 2013

Oh, this is cute. It made me feel so good inside :)

You started the characters off very distinctly and with their own voices, which was good! Particularly Mr. Thomas, his words are the perfect words of a gruff old man. "Scram," was spot on.

That said, one criticism, right at the beginning. The phrase is,

Shocked, I bit my lip...


Shocked definitely stood out for me as the wrong word. After what he said, even with rolling his eyes, I would suggest "put off" or "flustered." Someone rolling their eyes is, personally, not that big of a shocker to me.

In all, a lovely idea. It seems heartwarming :) Good job, well written. Thank you for sharing!

Laminated

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KatyyMayy
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KatyyMayy commented Comment · Jul 18, 2013

I love the idea of this story, and I like the style of your writing; it flows easily.

Overall, Your're an great author. I'm really impressed. And looking forward for the next chapter.

'Curiously, I glanced at Mr. Thomas. His gaze felt almost absent. How had this cruel man acted so kind to her? He certaintly wasn't kind to me. Alyssa stepped towards Mr. Thomas, who was alerted by the sound alone. He stood a little straighter and Alyssa reached a hand up to his face. She waved her hand back and forth. "Mr. Thomas, how many fingers am I holding up?"'

This part was easily my favorite.

Keep up the good work!


Please update soon!

Xoxoxoxoxos,
Love Katy.

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deleted17
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deleted17 wrote a review Review · Jul 18, 2013

I liked it there was a grammical mistake, but only one. Other than that I have high hopes for this novel. I really like the way you write, you just keep it up my friend. I hope we get to hear what musical they chose! (Please don't do Beauty and The Beast. It's famous enough thanks to Disney) I read anything and everything, so long as it interesting. Because there no such thing as a bad book!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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sarahma96 commented Comment · Jul 17, 2013

I love the idea of this story, and it has been touching. I think that if you make the change in Mr. Thomas' mind about the school play more gradual, it'll be better. Right now the story's good, but in my opinion, the "stating Mr. Thomas is blind" part is a BIT abrupt. Other than that, good job!



It is most unlikely. But - here comes the big "but" - not impossible.
— Roald Dahl