LadySpark

Hey darling. Let's dance. :) Dear Girl In My Dreams, fix the formatting. You start off with cliche imagery that doesn't really pull the reader in at all. The idea ...

hey darling. Let's dance. While I ADORE the concept you have going here, the imagery is weak and the repetitive, so what you're going for here, which I really really ...

Hi, darling. Let's jam. The beginning isn't a hook. It's blatantly prosaic. In fact, the entire poem is prosaic. That not necessarily a bad thing, but it can get in ...

Hey darling. I understand that this is a very personal subject for you, so I'm going to start this review by saying that I understand where this poem is coming ...

Hey babe. As always, I adore your poetry. Okay, as far as imagery goes, I'd much rather have "I have written songs with the breath of stars" instead of "on ...

Hi babe. I know you said that you want a cliche love story, so I'm not going to comment on cliche things, because I respect that's what you want. (even ...

hey darling. I'll have to make this quick, cause I'm supposed to leave in like ten minutes so. This reminds me a lot of the "there are many names in ...

Hey darling. Surprise ;) This is gonna be a combined review for both 1.1 and 1.2. Okay, your grammar is impeccable, so I'm just gonna talk about what I'm seeing. ...

Hey there! I'm Spark, here to review :) Okay first thing I notice is your inconsistent caps. Artistic license says you can choose not to use caps or not, I ...

Hi Sweetie. First off I'd like you to add me to your list that you send updates too when you update this. It's cute and I like it. Okay but. ...

Hey there! Yours is going to be my first since I got back from my lurking for (3 months!!) so pardon me if I'm a bit rusty when it comes ...

Hey babe. I told you I'd come give you my impressions once I read it all, and even though it took me a lot longer than I thought it would, ...

Hey Babe! i like my baths scorching like your passion never was. UGH THIS LINE I LOVE IT SO MUCH on a minor g chord. I would delete this line. ...

Morning, Ty. Let's talk poeting. they would have featured cartoons drawn in ball-point pen, and one or two would have been taken by the teacher. This has really really weird ...

Hey there. I spotted this, and I had to come review, so let's get down to business. Oh darling, put down that book! Stop trying to look smarter than you ...