Young Writers Society

The poem was amazing! I loved every bit. most errors were picked out by some one else. The rhyming was very smooth, which is amazing. I also really liked the title. I liked the way you described love. Many people do not see it from that angle. The word arrangement was quite nice. The read flow was incredible. I like how it ended with a question. I seriously loved this. Very nice piece.

Over all I really enjoyed it and can tell you are a great writer. Don't ever stop writing! Peace out!

The poem was amazing! I loved every bit. most errors were picked out by some one else. The rhyming was very smooth, which is amazing. I also really liked the title. I liked the way you described love. Many people do not see it from that angle. The word arrangement was quite nice. The read flow was incredible. I like how it ended with a question. I seriously loved this. Very nice piece.

Over all I really enjoyed it and can tell you are a great writer. Don't ever stop writing! Peace out!

Hello! Dogsrule5 here to review!

So first of all I thought this was a very good poem, but I did find a few nitpicks/mistakes.

1. Your stanzas are uneven. You don't have to make them even, but you should. It gets kind of overwhelming when you have uneven stanzas. Alright so that's number one.

2. In your first stanza in the second line going into the third you should add a comma after clipped, but before the but. Example...
Before

Where your wings are clipped
But your soul is free.

Where your wings are clipped,
But your soul is free.

Hey there! Yours is going to be my first since I got back from my lurking for (3 months!!) so pardon me if I'm a bit rusty when it comes to reviewing. I'm Spark, by the way. I don't think we've met.

This is a very interesting take on love. Right out you start with a very angry and morose theme. You don't tell us why you have decided love is dark and depressing, you just set the tone instantly. And I have to confess, I don't think it's working for you. It sets such a heavy heavy beat that you don't even give us a chance to agree with you. It's commanding, and I myself, a lover of depressing poetry, felt myself shy away from it because it gave us no backstory. You just plopped us down and said 'this is how it is.'
However, you had some beautiful moments. Including

Where your wings are clipped
But your soul is free.

Love is a stranger in an open place
Like a ghost in the winter
With fog for a face.

Love is a yearning thought desire
Love is like burning down (?)
With the heat of a fire.

Love is what binds you,
And comes without cost,
But is it enough
To redeem what you've lost?

Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here...

I really like this perspective that you show right here, it is really unique and I quite enjoy this piece that you made. Love is considered sometimes to be a chain that stops you from somethings. Then at some points it is what frees you from home or family. I love the metaphors that you have created here because they are so beautiful. I am even curious if you have gone through something like this and you decided to make some poetry on this. One thing that I question about your piece is the categorizing of this. Why would this be general, general? Shouldn't it be romantic and something else? I like to know the topic of the things that I read before I actually read it so I know what you want it to be. An idea for another poem is how love may set you free because love does, at times, set you free as a bird. Overall, I loved the theme of this poem, beautiful in many ways. I think that you have great grammar and spelling in this poem and that is always a great thing in all poetry. I really like how you organized this piece and the last question that you gave because it really left me thinking about you poem(kind off like an essay sometimes does but it's always great in poetry). Have a nice review week! Keep calm and keep writing!