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Re: The Slaughterhouse
Whoa, I found this really...creepy, but sort of humorous. I don't really know. It was epic. Here's what I noticed: Welcome, unknowing tourists! Beautiful opening. We have all sorts of ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Broken Suburban Glass
As she screams “You’re heartless-a monster” If these are all one person talking, you don't need end quotes until the last part. “And I am a liar, but I can ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: -deleted-
This poem is really cool! It's loving yet sad and enjoyable at the same time. Some things I noticed were: My friend, so close, In air... These dots here(and the ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Trust
Trust. I like the period here. A funny Five letter word Period here. You blew mine away Like dust Period My world has Been held by many Try a comma ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: A pity, Beauty
This poem is so elegant and beautiful. It sounds so proper and gentle - it reminds me of a tea party! :D Beauty, pity your broken soul, I love this ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Flying
Wow. This is a very inspirational piece of poetry. That, and I just finished watching "Fly Away Home" about flying geese, so this is just really cool! Let me see ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Annoying
XD XD XD I totally have someone that I should listen to this poem! Do you mind if I recite it to him? I really liked this. It's really funny ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: A Poet's Land
I loved this! All of it! You did a fabulous job describing stuff and giving words an image, giving it depth. You had a lot of good vocabulary in this ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: i hold the keys
Okay, since Soulkana did a really nice job with most of the grammar, I'm gonna assume that you'll listen to that advice and look at some other stuff besides grammar, ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: I give.
This is beautiful!!! Wow, you did an amazing job here. The last stanza is, by far, the best, I think. But I liked the entire thing! The other reviewers did ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: My Love for You Will Never Die
Awesome Possum! The spelled out title was cool, but a little hard to read. Try bolding the letters or making them coloured or something. That way we can still enjoy ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Light
You had good imagery with this and described stuff very well. I think this is a great topic and you did a great job with the emotion and everything. You ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Human Life
I loved this poem! To me it made sense and I understood it. I liked the topic, you had good ideas here. Humans aren't meant to die I think you ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The precise and mighty
Shiney already did a great job with the detailed work, so I don't have a lot to add. I do agree that that one line is broken up a little ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Braindead
I think I know what you're going for, but you haven't quite reached it yet. There's something that this poem needs, but I'm not sure exactly what yet. I can’t ...
May 1, 2011
