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Kwantack

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Slaughterhouse

    Whoa, I found this really...creepy, but sort of humorous. I don't really know. It was epic. Here's what I noticed: Welcome, unknowing tourists! Beautiful opening. We have all sorts of ...

    May 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Broken Suburban Glass

    As she screams “You’re heartless-a monster” If these are all one person talking, you don't need end quotes until the last part. “And I am a liar, but I can ...

    May 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: -deleted-

    This poem is really cool! It's loving yet sad and enjoyable at the same time. Some things I noticed were: My friend, so close, In air... These dots here(and the ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Trust

    Trust. I like the period here. A funny Five letter word Period here. You blew mine away Like dust Period My world has Been held by many Try a comma ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A pity, Beauty

    This poem is so elegant and beautiful. It sounds so proper and gentle - it reminds me of a tea party! :D Beauty, pity your broken soul, I love this ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Flying

    Wow. This is a very inspirational piece of poetry. That, and I just finished watching "Fly Away Home" about flying geese, so this is just really cool! Let me see ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Annoying

    XD XD XD I totally have someone that I should listen to this poem! Do you mind if I recite it to him? I really liked this. It's really funny ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Poet's Land

    I loved this! All of it! You did a fabulous job describing stuff and giving words an image, giving it depth. You had a lot of good vocabulary in this ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: i hold the keys

    Okay, since Soulkana did a really nice job with most of the grammar, I'm gonna assume that you'll listen to that advice and look at some other stuff besides grammar, ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I give.

    This is beautiful!!! Wow, you did an amazing job here. The last stanza is, by far, the best, I think. But I liked the entire thing! The other reviewers did ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: My Love for You Will Never Die

    Awesome Possum! The spelled out title was cool, but a little hard to read. Try bolding the letters or making them coloured or something. That way we can still enjoy ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Light

    You had good imagery with this and described stuff very well. I think this is a great topic and you did a great job with the emotion and everything. You ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Human Life

    I loved this poem! To me it made sense and I understood it. I liked the topic, you had good ideas here. Humans aren't meant to die I think you ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The precise and mighty

    Shiney already did a great job with the detailed work, so I don't have a lot to add. I do agree that that one line is broken up a little ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Braindead

    I think I know what you're going for, but you haven't quite reached it yet. There's something that this poem needs, but I'm not sure exactly what yet. I can’t ...

    May 1, 2011


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