Krupp

Sounds like a bunch of thoughts that were strung off in rapid, machine-gun fashion... And that makes it uncomfortable to read. The clautstrophobic feel of the poem in that case ...

Well, I'll just be honest. The rhyming scheme worked, but I feel that the scheme actually drained the poem a bit. I think the piece would've done better as lyrics ...

This was much appreciated as a really speaks to me. A bit simplistic in nature, but the message is strong enough to make up for the simplicity. That's great, because ...

To be honest, I had a hard time trying to figure out what you were trying to say exactly... Was this piece a metaphor about taking risks in life? If ...

A few grammar issues were in there, but I won't harp about character development because everyone else has already tagged that.. I think this piece needs a tad bit more ...

It sounds similar to something...I just can't think of WHAT. But I have to agree with the poster above me; the meaning doesn't necessarily be obvious, but I think small ...

This is a good start.... The only thing I really would've liked to see more of was imagery; in fact, that felt like it was almost completely missing from the ...

For some strange reason this preface makes me recall Hunter S. Thompson...I can't figure out why though. It's a good start. I didn't really see any real glaring errors that ...

This isn't a bad piece, but I think maybe the pace should be changed a bit. When I was reading it I was fumbling over the lines, trying to read ...

Well, I gotta be seems kind of bland. When I say that, I mean that it doesn't really have a beating heart. And what I mean by that is that ...

Cheesy this poem might have been, but it worked out well, which was a surprise... Honestly, the rhyming scheme was what made this piece great. The simplicity of the piece ...

As short as it was, this was admirable for its stortelling. The imagery was great as well.. I really don't have much to say. There were two grammar errors that ...

This contained a lot of decent imagery, and I have a deep respect for that. But it was a bit too vague, in my opinion. There was a tale behind ...

I really wish I could find soemthing to say about this...sorry. It's too good and simple for me to really critique or spot any kind of error. The only thing ...

It's difficult (at least for me) to rhyme, so I have to give you credit for doing something that I rarely ever do. WIth that said, the simplicity of this ...