Kbug1997

Hello! I am not sure if this is suppose to be a short story or the prolog for a novel but I love it! If it is for a novel ...

Hello. This almost brought me to tears. In less than 20 lines you told a full story of a life and one that is relatable to many people thus making ...

Hello! Okay first your title had me hooked!! There is soo much truth held in those five words that in all of the English language sometimes! This poem has a ...

Hello! Okay to start off with the sentence "The general was always liked to play warmonger." Sounds a bit odd. I think that you wanted "was" to be "has". Also ...

Hello! The use of the main character's name is overused, just like in your first chapter, again, sub out her name for pronouns. Now in your first chapter you had ...

Hello! Great start to a story. There is a lot of framework you have set yourself up with like who is this mystery boy? What will happen to her since ...

Hello! Your word choice is wonderful! Very nice in selecting your phrases as well as grouping your words together. You used simple words but they hold a lot of power ...

Hello! Wow. There is one thing that I have always loved about Poetry and that is poems can convey intense and strong feelings. This poem is not exception. I love ...

Hello! Okay so you have a good start to a story and a plot line but honestly its a bit confusing to follow at times. Make sure that you are ...

Hello! Okay I am not going to get too nit picky with grammar, so lets talk about big picture and topic in general. You had me hooked after your first ...