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KatheryneAlyxandera

  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Book Of My Life

    "The sense of touches the skin has felt" seems a little awkward to me. Try adjusting the wording to make it fit better. Punctuation could use a little work; the ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Review Re: The Brave One

    This poem is very short and sweet. In my opinion, "You don't take a breath" seems a little out of place..Perhaps a re-wording, or something of the such? I think ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic Re: What the Night Knows

    This is beautifully written. I love the metaphors and similes used in this-absolutely fantastic. There is honestly nothing I would change about this. This is wonderfully written and lovely to ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Review Re: choices

    This is beautiful. The flow of this is wonderful. This is very realistic as well. It painted pictures in my head while I was reading. :) I like the usage ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: "Come home.." (Rewritten)

    Wow, this is beautiful. I absolutely love this. The message behind this truly got me thinking, "Why live?". That is an excellent thing for an author to do, making their ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Spiritual Re: Lost

    Hello, I like this, however there are a few things I would change. :P "The path I walked carpeted All in faded colors, I stopped." That, to me, seems a ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Horror Re: Drinking Goodbye

    Hi there, I personally love this. I relate to this perfectly. Anyways, the shortness of this poem is perfect, and punctuation is spot on. The message behind this really hit ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Teenage Love

    Hello, I'd like to start off by saying that the repetition of "Silly me" is a great way to suck the reader in. Repetitions in poems are surely something to ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Deleted

    This is a great Mother's Day poem- I'm sure your mother will love it. Just one quick comment- in the line, "I apologize in advanced", there is just a simple ...

    May 11, 2013


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