KatTrain

she kneels in her garden as if in prayer spine curved, knotted hands plunging in earth. the rim of her straw hat is frayed, the gloves threadbare. her fingers search ...

This is a novel attempt for me, to write romantically. Please, tell me what you think of this poem: Here are my hands They will work for you Here are ...

Love is a malicious gift, Delicious torment, A toxic kiss. Love, from whence this poision drips, Destroys my will, My will to live. This burning pain is all I have, ...

I dodge lightening bolts[color=#FF0000], In a raging storm. I'm searching for shelter, For all around me is darkness. I would dress this line up with a bit more imagery/sophisticated words ...

I'm consumed in fire, and drenched with hate... All we need is love, -- boring, typical lines no pain, no worries, no fights. --- boring language As the wolf bellows ...

I know there are faults, so help me please. Or, you know, just burn it to ash. -------------------------- Forget you I shall not, or anything you do or say. Forgive ...

Unlike the other reviewer, I understood what you were talking about. But that fact just annoyed me. The narrator comes off as self absorbed, thinking they are so important that ...

Please, please do not listen to Vast. (no offense but i liked how the lines were placed-alot). I loved your detail and for once, it did not bore me like ...

A Starry Night There was a gnawing inside of him. -- i dont like this line, it's not very fluent It started at his heavy heart at the chasm, -- ...

*Poem lacks a smooth rhythm, try reading it aloud and revising *The beginning isn't very inspiring, maybe use some more interesting words. The whole concept of them poem wasn't exciting ...

And I will find them all someday From an island lost in the blue. ---- You know the line in a poem that makes you fall deeper into it? This ...

It's simple and declarative, but in a unpleasing way describe the bird and tree more! why does that person's name mean so much? answer that question in the poem, it ...

You left and now I'm alone Alone in this world of secrets and lies This place where I can not hide Why did you Leave Me to Die? I read ...

I return to send the message In which our parents tried So very hard to deliver On the parenting ride you used parent(ing) twice I didn't much like it, it ...

We are really nice 'nice' is over used We are there for each other in the end But we just love to yell. yelling and there for eachother aren't tied ...