Karzkin

This is a nice little pair of senryu. However, they are not haiku. You might like to have a look at this : It is a crash course in writing ...

Could everyone please, please learn the difference between a haiku and a senryu. This is not a haiku as it contains no kigo (seasonal or nature reference), no keriji (a ...

Contrary to what Ignatius said, the rhyme scheme was hardly poor. But he is right, it could be improved. The first stanza is good, nothing to say here. The second ...

Hello again Alzora. I consider haikus a bit of a speciallity of mine, so if you don't mind, I'll take a look at yours. This is almost an excellent example ...

I disagree with bsbfan. I think this is a very clever piece, especially because it is so short. I especially like the line "an echo of silence". This is a ...

I'm sorry to say, but I did not like this at all. It's a nice idea, but the execution was all over the place. I'll take it line by line. ...

Hello there. This is excellent. Great concept, and well explored. However, a number of critiques (of course). First, a few small qualms relating to your use of punctuation: Waiting for ...

I disagree in part with both of the previous reviews. First, with Amelia: While everything she says is correct, I would dispute the use of a dash in the third ...

How can you possibly say that you're an Atheist, yet you have no faith? Atheism requires as much faith in scientific method and human endeavour as any religion does in ...

Hahaha this is great. The first one nearly killed me, I was laughing so hard. A few notes on form, however: there are 3 things a haiku must have to ...

Hello :) Interesting topic. Social commentary can always be provocative. The first stanza (the first four lines at least) is very good. A strong start. It has good rhythm with ...

Writing poetry without rhyme is like playing tennis with the net down. However, I suggest you research other rhyming schemes, such as the villanelle, clerihew, cinquain, ottava, etc. Using a ...

I'm not sure if this is exactly cricket, but I think some of you have missed the point. Repetition is a technique intentionally used. For example, The Love Song of ...

This is brilliant, I loved it. The line I suffer only at your hand is just great, as are the last two lines. This is, however, a critique. So here ...

I really like this. A lilymoore said, your character is great, and I think the metaphor works rather well. I think there are a few ways you could improve this ...