Kalliope

Hey AS, this sounds like a fun one! Let's walk with our pride up, hoping We'll see the world wide open While waiting for the right kind of moment To ...

Hey, I absolutely love this. Can't wait for more. I exspecially like how you ended it. Maria seems so nice and sweet to her younger daughter and then she turns ...

Hey carelessaussie, Wow, this nearly made me cry. I absolutely love it. Maybe you could extend the parts where Brian describes being blind and the part about him being afraid ...

Hey Alice, I've been wanting to critique this one for ages, so here I go. Riley sat on [s]the[/s] bench, his elbows on his knees, resting his head in his ...

Hi Lexicalized, I actually quite like this ^-^ You have a lovely flow and this really would fit a country song. It's just that type of lyrics. It’s a Friday ...

Hi Cherish, eventhough there are a lot of songs like this one out there, I like this. There are a couple things I might change: I underlined parts I might ...

Hey Alice, this one is neat^^ (by the way, I hope I wasn't too harsh in my last crit :( ) Exept for the logical error Doctor Clicky mentioned. I ...

Hey Catriona (by the way, I really like your name ^^), This is quite good^^ You have a nice flow and the rhyming works. Verse one: I’m lost in this ...

I agree with Poebe, that this song is very sweet. It's a very nice lullaby and lullabies are supposed to be repetative, but I think it's alittle over done in ...

Hey Kyte, I really like this and I'm interested in reading more :) You have some nice dialogue, but I think you could use some more description. Exspecially you charcters ...

Hey Rag-Dolly, I like this! You have a nice casual way of letting your character describe everything. It's a bit like in some movies (the main character kind of talks ...

Hey Kyte, I like this. You have anice flow and the rhyming is clear affective and natural. I also like the imagery, it creates a wonderful scene. My only complaint: ...

Hey, You have a nice flow in most places and a neat topic. As Quippie said, it is a bit short and I think this is definetly worth continuing :wink: ...

Hey, Alice, I'm not sure about this one. I basically really like your idea of describing a situation where someone does not feel ready to face the day and just ...

Hey, I like the idea of this. It's original and I can perfectly relate to it. I also like, that you have part of the chorous spoken. I think it ...