Published January 12, 2008
Lonesome Blue Night
©2007 Lexicalized.
It’s a Friday night,
Got nothing to do;
Just lyin’ here, sittin’ here
Thinkin’ ‘bout you.
It’s a Friday night,
Got no one to see.
Just close my eyes, see you there,
Lookin’ at me.
(CHORUS)
Quick, open my eyes,
‘Cause I can’t stand the pain,
With your memory to haunt
In this pouring rain.
So, I sit here alone
In this lonesome blue night,
Wishin’ you were here
Close by my side,
In this lonesome,
Lonesome blue night.
It’s a Saturday night,
And I’m home again,
With a broken-down heart
That just won’t mend.
It’s a Saturday night,
And I see you there
With your pretty blue eyes
And your long, dark hair.
(CHORUS 2)
Quick, open my eyes
‘Cause I can’t stand the sight
Of your tear-streaked face
Right after our fight.
So, I sit here alone
In this lonesome blue night,
Wishin’ I could go back,
An’ do things right,
On this lonesome-
Lonesome blue night.
Well it’s all over now
And you’re gone for good
But I can’t move on
Like I know I should
No, not on this lonesome,
Lonesome Blue Night.
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Some of the rhythm didn't seem to make sense, but it was still really good. Maybe it was just way different in my head then it was in actuality, but that's what I thought of it.
Hey there!
I think it is a nice country song and has a nice rythym.
I haven't been on for 2 months so I won't talk much, just got to get use to this again. It wasn't bad.
Hi Lexicalized,
I actually quite like this ^-^
You have a lovely flow and this really would fit a country song. It's just that type of lyrics.
This part is very nice, because it gives you the situation and if it's sung right I think it will kind of let the listener dive in [in lack of a better way to describe it...] I exspecially love the last two lines.
Sad enough after your good beginning, I didn't like this part. It sounds cliche to me and I think maybe you should change it.
I think there was a little much 'lonesome blue night' in this part and somehow it seems weaker then the rest.
Hmm.. there is one question I have about this: At the beginning, when the 'I' is thinking about the 'you', are they already not getting along? [I'm sorry, if it's obvious, but I kind of got a certain picture in my head during the first two verses]
I could qoute about everything else and tell you how great I find it
I hope you [or someone else] get's a kick out of singing this, I think it would be awsome fun, but I can't sing, so..
Keep it up
~Kalli