Each night I think of you before I close my eyes,
and I'm drenched with an unexplainable joy.
I wish that I could tell you how much you mean to me
but there's a million things silencing my lips.
Every single moment, you're somewhere in my mind
Every single second, you take up more and more of my time
Chorus:
Can't escape, can't hide
In a way I don't want to try
You lift me up, make me soar...
For a minute I believe I can fly.
Can't escape, can't hide
I don't want to say goodbye.
Cause when i'm loving you
I feel so much more alive.
We started out on parallel roads, always side by side
Never crossing paths, never meeting at one point.
One day the world tipped toward my side, you fell into my life.
It was the best thing that ever happened to me
Every single moment, you're somewhere in my mind.
Every single second, you take up more and more of my time.
Chorus.
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Hi Cherish,
eventhough there are a lot of songs like this one out there, I like this.
There are a couple things I might change:
I underlined parts I might reword.
What is silencing the 'you's lips? is the question that popped in my head reading this. You never say...
I really like these lines.
This is a completely different image than in the first verse, but I think it's nice!
I really like the first three lines, but I think the last one is kind of weak.
Over all I like this, but I think you might want to add alittle more. Other than that: Good job!
Keep it up!
~Kalli