Justagirl

Never say " I Love You " If you really do not care. Great start :D Never talk about having feelings, If they aren't truly there! This line is a ...

Wow, great poem. The emotion is great in this but the flow seems a little weird. It's probably because of the couple of sentences that are a few words longer ...

Like many of your other poems this needs some more punctuation. Other than that it was pretty good. The only thing I would change is the amount of periods you ...

I received a decent educated (?) and focused on my studies. Check out this sentence? It's a little weird... Other than the part I pointed out above this is a ...

To see what lays inside . You will get a story , But can you pick out truth from lies ? L i ke a metaphor , I am a ...

Let it's brightness (I added a break here) widen your smile. One more push (added a break here too) and sail to Greece , or to Rome , or to ...

But we ignore the fact that it's there. You should join this line into the 2 above it then add the break. N obody realizes what they'll do to feel ...

Lol, really great work here - so far it's really funny XD The only thing I saw that was wrong was... You want to get rid of her because she's ...

I wish I could tell him how I feel , I wish he could know this is real . No hate , no lies - p ure love is what ...

Great job. There's only a couple of problems... 1. You have a couple of punctuation errors, try and revise it to find them and it should help ;) 2. You ...

Great job with this! Since everyone else has pointed out the grammatical and capitalization errors I'll just say everything else. ;) Your flow is great and so is your emotion. ...

Ok, so, like Ignatius says you need to break it up. Luckily, I'm willing to do that for you! Here, this is my, broken up, version. (Then I'll get on ...

Ok, I've read this over twice and then I tried to figure it out and my fizzled out. I think I'd better not try to solve it again or I ...

The rank stink of alcohol This line breaks up the flow a bit. The sticky heat clinging to her skin Try and find a shorter way to say this? Like, ...

Great poem! I kind of love it when you mean it to be something then it turns out to be something else. Don't you? Anyways, I saw no problems with ...