Always and forever

I love this poem! It has a strong message that people understand and (unfortunately) endure every day. The rhyme scheme is simple, but that works well for the poem. Maybe try experimenting with different styles and techniques until you come up with something that is 100% you. Keep writing! This is excellent!

The poem was great. I really enjoyed it. I liked how the stanza were short and got to the point. And the poem was written very well and it put me in a happy mood, (because I tried to bake a cake and usually it works, but I forgot to and vinegar so it didn't turn out right) so keep writing,

Hallie I absolutely love this poem. It's Beautiful keep posting for the good of the world!♥

Thank you very much Doxie00..... I loved this poem to:)

Haa i loved this poem. I liked the way every verse starts the same way and yeah the messgae of your poem. Lovely

thank you remeberdecember.

Thank you!:)

This is really great, I think it's a poem everyone can relate to, and it's really nicely portrayed.

Never say 'I Love You'
If you really do not care.
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there!

Never hold my hand
If you're just gonna break my heart. (This line is too long. If you have to read it to fit the rhythm, you have to read it in a way that sounds weird and awkward)
Never claim you're going to,
If you never plan to start!

Never look into my eyes, (I really love this verse! It just flows so beautifully when you read it!)
If all you do is lie.
Never even say 'Hello'
If you really mean 'Goodbye'

If you really mean forever
Then fail after saying you'll try.
NEVER say forever because
Forever usually ends up making me cry! (This it too long too. Maybe you could try something like, "Forever usaually makes me cry!" or something like that! But forever makes me cry too!)

Quick comment:)
I really liked this poem and I wouldn't change anything about it.
It really shows how many things you have to go through in life to get to the good parts.
I could really feel the emotion coming through it as the words flowed out.
Overall, I really thought you used all the right words and I wouldn't change anything about it.
Keep writing:)

thank you:)

Thank you everyone I love this poem...

i love it!!
this is soooooo TRUE (all caps) hahaaha

Never say "I Love You"
If you really do not care. ----> i think "Don't" was more appropriate
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there

Well, I'm being honest right now, hope you're not one of those people to take it strong, but I didn't like it. The point you were trying to show was clear, and it was a good point, but the way you wrote was kind of flimsy (excuse my vocabulary).
It was weak and lacking emotion. The last line -

"Forever usually ends up making me cry!"


broke the rhythm (non-existent rhythm).
Again, you might want to consider the wording. And no hard feelings.

I really don't think I can say much else that hasn't already been said, other than I really liked this. It's so true to real life. I also loved the perfect flow with the rhyming, because sometimes that can get shaky. Great job, and keep it up!

I love the rhythm of the words, the rhymes fit nicely into your poem. I also like the truth in it, because these days these words are true. hope this review helps a little!!!!

Very good, an impressive piece of work. Keep it up.
I hope to see more works like this from you.
You'll go far kid, you'll go to the stars!

Anyway, congratulations on this piece of work and I can see this is very popular.

Pretty good. It shows a good point. Is also hard to say things with rhyming poetry and i think that u explained it very well.

Okay thank you I am trying... right now I am starting to right another poem at home it will be posted before wednesday!! Not sure what the title will be yet though I am still trying to think about that..

Awww I love it........very nice. I also can totally relate too. Keep on posting! <3

Thank you very much!!

Never say "I Love You"
If you really do not care. Great start
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there! This line is a little awkward and I don't think you need an exclamation point at the end of it.

If you never plan to start!

Never even say "Hello"
If you really mean "Goodbye".

thank you very much... But i kind of had a hard tme reading what you wrote because either you left a letter off a word or something like that...

Hello racingforever10,
This is reall a good poem you have here! The emotion and diction match well. The ony thig hat caught mye ye as something you mght want to consider fixing is the last ine.

Forever usually ends up making me cry!

Yes and I hate it when that happens that is one reason why I posted that I thought It was a very good for people with relationships

Aweeh. It was so sweet and true. Im sure girls and guys would love to say this to someone. I know I would. Please keep writing, you're really good

Never even say 'Hello'
If you really mean 'Goodbye'

I loved it. The message was so true! I think that guys and girls do this to eachother so often, and it isn't right. Why pretend to be n a relationhip? It's jut hurting everyone. You did a great job conveying this, and it was really good. Keep writing!

I loved it. "Don't hold my hand if you're gonna break my heart" I think a lot of girls would like to tell that to a guy.

thank you, freewritersavvy.. I do keep keeping of things I have found one poem not sure when I am going to post it though... but it will probably be today..

It is beautiful!
Keep writing
~FW~

yes you can that is fine with me, I am trying my hardest to get more points to be able to post another poem.... I loved this poem to that's why I put it on there...

Hallie,
I absolutley love this poem, my style...as you know is not rhyming, but you have done it so nicely.
I really love this poem, and defintley can relate to this as I'm sure many others can, good work!

I want to quote this...if that's okay with you. Can't wait to read more!

thank you.. I am waiting to get points to be able to.... I loved that line to thought that it was very true also...

I love it. It make a lot of sense.

Never say 'I Love You'
If you really do not care.

thank you very much I am tryign to post more...

Aww! I love this poem! I find that most rhyming poetry tends to be clumpy and disjointed and corny...however this one was different...it flowed beautifully! I have only one nitpick...

racingforever10 wrote:Never hold my hand
If you're just gonna break my heart. - this sentence seems too long for the stanza, try: 'If you're going to break my heart.'
Never claim you're going to,
If you never plan to start!