Published June 6, 2011
Fathers.....
They are there to love
There to care
And to provide
Fathers
They love because God first loved
They care because they love
They provide because they love
Fathers
They were sent by God
Created by God
Loved by their family and God
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thank you:)
the concept of your poem is very good but not always true
Thank you very !! adn I am still writing I have another poem at home I am finishing..
Great poem, I wish it had never ended. The entire poem was so moving, like you knew exactly what you were going on about. Great job, I couldn't have done anything better on the subject than this, and I doubt anybody else could have done so. great job, Keep Writing!
thank you love2write...and thanks Vramel...
A very good poem, though I made my own personal edits just for fun.
I would hope this gets top, because it is worth it in it's own short beauty. It is surely an art of Literature.
This is very good keep up the good work.
thank you very much I appreciate it!!:)
Like many of your other poems this needs some more punctuation.
Other than that it was pretty good. The only thing I would change is the amount of periods you put in the beginning. See if you can lessen it a bit because with how many there are now it seems like you're trying to stall the start of the poem.
Also, this poem seems a little bland in the emotion department. But, you did ok.
Good job.
Keep writing,
Alzora