Juniper

Hi, Galadriel! I'm June. :) This is a beautiful short store, Gal. I really like the way you begin with smaller details and build up to the larger picture. The ...

Hey dogs, I agree with the reviewers above me; this could be a creative start, but it needs work. I would strongly suggest adding to this. ;) In the first ...

Hi Paper Moon! No, no, no, you're not forgotten at all. :P In fact, I was wondering whatever happened to you just the other day. So, it seems like this ...

Hey, e.gill! June here! Just want to let you know that YWS does have a lyrics section. ;) It's a bit not easy to spy, but if you hit the ...

Hey Mandey! June here! As I read through this poem, the first thing I noticed was that your poem is pulling by rhyme, and not meaning. I often say that ...

Paaaalantalid! The beginning of this was off to a wonderful start. The rhyme was nicely paced; didn't stick out too much, so it was barely noticeable (which is good!). However, ...

Hey Silented! I liked this poem! It was rather peaceful, flowed nice and evenly -- overall a nice poem! I don't like how you end each line with an ellipsis ...

Hi Flower! So, one of the main things about this poem that slightly throws it off is the repetition of tick tock. I understand that's for stylistic effect, but seeing ...

Hey Dragon! I like this poem! My only complaint would be that the repetition of colors in the first two lines sounds a little bit heavy, as in it's slowing ...

Hey God! I haven't reviewed you in ages. :P SO! I think this is a really great piece, because it feels like your poured your heart and thoughts into this, ...

Jester! June here! Haha, this is gold. I love, love, love how you created the tone at the beginning; I was honestly expecting it to be something more like a ...

Hey Bryanne! So, this poem was fairly decent, although I have to say that it did not carry anything new for the audience. It's pretty much the most common topic ...

Hey Angel! June here! Most of what I would have mentioned has been said by Hannah, so for the sake of not being repetitive, I'll just say I concur Hannah ...

Hello, Dogs! Welcome to YWS! YWS has a 2:1 ratio policy, which means that before you post one thing, you should complete two reviews. ;) [s]what[/s] What is the point ...

Darko! Juniper here! Okay, so, to start, I'm going to be mean (:P) and say that this is by far not one of your best poems. :P To be honest, ...