the shadows are dancing..

Dang, this is really good.
Its very descriptive (I think that's how you spell it)
Its very good...
I love it when it rains...so much inspiration...
ha anyways ...
keep up the good work...

hehe...thank you.... this poem would go good with my other poem the forest's bed.. thats in my yws blog.... they are kinda the same thing... except this focuses more on the rain and you sleeping where as the other focuses on the scene rather than you.....

Wow! (yes, i had to review it!)
I really like this, it has a really peaceful rhythm and flow, it just reads well i guess.
I agree with the ellipsis comment, on occasional lines in the poem i think they'd be good, that would giving it a sort of musing effect. But when they are pretty much everywhere it gives a feeling that each line is in a way unfinished. (sorry if that made no sense)
but i really liked it. i would like to read more!
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haha thank you.. the dots are my habit of pausing while i talk... and i write how i talk.. mispronounced = misspelling....as you can see i use these dots a lot...its a habit of mine...i gotta remember to take them out...

please excuse my slang.. i suppose...and i'm never sure of my thoughts.. i always need to question myself and others... its how time moves forward....i suppose..

Hey Silented!

I liked this poem! It was rather peaceful, flowed nice and evenly -- overall a nice poem!

I don't like how you end each line with an ellipsis (...); that kind of takes away the statement of your line, dear, because it's adding a slight uncertain sound to it, as if you're not entirely sure of your thoughts.

when it is untouched by man..

left to work

on its own acordance..

with the natural..

rhythems and beats..

making sure you rest

soundly..