the poem is really well written i often feel that way when i see rainbows but one thing that i noticed in the poem was the line laughing meanly that expression doesn't have any real feeling to it that word doesn't fit the other emotions you express throughout the poem when i read the latter lines in the poem i could imagine seeing you sitting by a window with longing in your eyes wishing to touch the thing that you feel is so beautiful which is a human nature when someone wants something very badly but i think that you closed really well when you said
it slowly fades away
i sit by the window,
waiting for another one
that gives the poem closure
over all i enjoyed the poem and i hope you continue making poetry
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