Juniper

This poem is a free form poem. I was thinking of how evil society can be (a la The Phantom of The Opera), so forgive me if it sounds a ...

(Hey there! I just stumbled upon your poem and thought Ishould review/critique it) Sewers run red with blood. Un-speakable evil’s walk the street. (No hyphenating 'unspeakable'; no apostrophe in evi

The colours run into each other Stains of paint and orange juice on my summer dress. (This makes me think of a happy summer day; everything is smiling and happy ...

3 not-really-connected poems. They were too short to post as seperate ones though. Feeback appreciated. 1. Dresser At night I lay them out, each ribbon touched by so many thumbs, ...

(Hey there! I'm June and I'm going to be your critiquer today. When posting something for some one else to review, it's slightly better to leave off adding your notes, ...

[s] I'm terribly amateur-ish at poetry, being a beginner. Feel free to tear apart.[/s] Stop saying that :lol: it's far from true. ______ Forgetting all other things I take to ...

We draw thick outlines, try to make the colours suit. Base them on our sisters, mothers, future daughters. Cut out the crayon mouths, create the hands that hold the Ring ...

Explosion at the Glitter Factory They told us to look away from the flames, to ignore showering silver and mandarin green settling on our eyelashes. But we didn’t. Instead we ...

Lord of the flies and the sweet valley high series. Both made me fall asleep. But, I would read those every day if it would kill twilight. Sarah will tell ...

Yes. This is long. Yes, I love you so very much if you read it. (Yay! Finally, it's up! To me this wasn't long, it was beautifully lovely. Very few ...

(It's about time monsieur! ) Chapter Ten Childhood “Hey maddie (Capital M!) , Maddie!” Sarah played (,comma) “Look at Ruby’s wand, come look!” “I don’t want to, I want see ...

Wow! I stared at this poem for like 30 minutes, re-reading and getting lost in it. There's nothing I can change, honestly, and in my opinion it was perfect! I ...

Dark is The Night Yayers! A long poem! My favorite! Anyway, let's get to work. I'm not as mean today :twisted: so maybe it won't be as harsh. Dark is ...

Okay, when I first read this I said I just had to critique it... er give constructive criticism. I'm honestly not trying to be mean, but people keep telling me ...

Chapter Nine Ruby’s Revenge “Hurry” Mary panted (,) “We must leave, immediately!” (scrap the comma) She ran over to the Canaby sisters with her rag – sheik tunic flapping behind ...