Thankyou very much Squall, you rock for reading all my stuff.
I will definitely re-do it, wouldn't want to miss that gold star opportunity. 
Thanks again. You are very helpful, as always.
Sarah
xxx
My first attempt at poetry in years. It's probably terrible. ^_^ Tear apart, ya?
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The wind is suspiciously strong tonight, the rain
dancing with the charming darkness in
a sly and sinister step.
The stones which you trust with
uncertain footing are slippery, a pathway down
into the thrashing ocean below.
The branches of desperate trees slaughtered
slowly by the crushing atmosphere, while the roots
battle to stay in the ground.
Lost voices
echoing back and forth like
the hypnotizing lull of
an artist’s paintbrush.
Quickly down the scowling cliff face,
half stumbling, half falling,
eyes ablaze with
melancholy anticipation;
memories.
An embroidered handkerchief with
red thread lovingly patterned in the creases,
soaking thread.
You dart in and out of
rotting brown bushes,
brittle and dead, simply shadows
of the previous summer light.
You think of nothing, see nothing but
the sharp urgency of thunder jolts you.
The angry ocean,
its surface convulsing like
rippling dragon scales, as the beast
takes flight.
The tide sucking the beach with fangs,
an insatiable vampire , water dripping
onto the silent cemetery
of the helpless shore.
Black, swirling water
suffocates your ankles.
Thankyou very much Squall, you rock for reading all my stuff.
I will definitely re-do it, wouldn't want to miss that gold star opportunity.
Thanks again. You are very helpful, as always.
Sarah
xxx
Hey Castles.
Lost voices
echoing back and forth like
the hypnotizing lull of
an artist’s paintbrush.
Quickly down the scowling cliff face,
half stumbling, half falling,
eyes ablaze with
melancholy anticipation;
memories.
An embroidered handkerchief with
red thread lovingly patterned in the creases,
soaking thread.
Black, swirling water
suffocates your ankles.
The angry ocean,
its surface convulsing like
rippling dragon scales, as the beast
takes flight.
The tide sucking the beach with fangs,
an insatiable vampire , water dripping
onto the silent cemetery
of the helpless shore.
Good luck!
Thanks for reading, Princess.
I'm flattered you think it's the 'best' but it seriously isn't, compared to some of the amazing poetry on here. I'm very amateur, but I do try my best, and so thankyou for reading & enjoying it.
Sarah
xxx
Wow Sarah!!! Wow wow wow.... I am seriously impressed... This is one of the best....No.. The best Poem i had ever read.. I'm afraid I can give you no better critique on this.. I pride myself on my critiques, but i have none for you today.. This is great!!!!!
I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*Princess*
No way Sarah XD 
I have no poetic-ness (not even a word but oh well!) in me. It's more like a rant than a poem ! (mine)
x
Aww thankyou so much for reading Kirsten.
Though your skills in poetry far outweigh mine, anyone reading Truth could see that. XD
xxx
The wind is suspiciously strong tonight, the rain
dancing with the charming darkness in
a sly and sinister step.
Oh Sarah! You dare to say you're not good at poetry. You lie, you lie! You're way too modest Sarah.
The stones which you trust with
uncertain footing are slippery, a pathway down
into the thrashing ocean below.
I love this part
The branches of desperate trees slaughtered
slowly by the crushing atmosphere, while the roots
battle to stay in the ground.
Amazing.
Lost voices
echoing back and forth like
the hypnotizing lull of
an artist’s paintbrush.
Perfection.
Quickly down the scowling cliff face,
half stumbling, half falling,
eyes ablaze with
melancholy anticipation;
memories.
W.O.W !
An embroidered handkerchief with
red thread lovingly patterned in the creases,
soaking thread.
You are amazing Sarah.
You dart in and out of
rotting brown bushes,
brittle and dead, simply shadows
of the previous summer light.
You think of nothing, see nothing but
the sharp urgency of thunder jolts you.
The angry ocean,
its surface convulsing like
rippling dragon scales, as the beast
takes flight.
The tide sucking the beach with fangs,
an insatiable vampire , water dripping
onto the silent cemetery
of the helpless shore.
Black, swirling water
suffocates your ankles.
Fantastic
Sarah, you are amazing at poetry! Write more! It's simply amazing. I don't really know why I review your pieces, you're so amazing I must be of no help at all just telling you how amazing you are. But you are.
Never doubt that you can write poetry cause seriously, t'is amazing !
-Kirsten x
Wow! I stared at this poem for like 30 minutes, re-reading and getting lost in it.
There's nothing I can change, honestly, and in my opinion it was perfect! I am a very picky person when it comes to poetry, so that's why I leave off reviewing it so often (so that I don't ruin the meaning of a poem). There is nothing I can tear apart here! It was brilliant!!!
I couldn't write something like this to save my life . Mine always come out deformed-- but this?? This was... like... (can't find the word...) amazing.
Do write more poetry! And it is indeed hard to believe that you haven't touched poetry in so long! One would certainly think that this is a frequent art of yours!
Keep writing!
June
Wow thankyou guys!
I really wasn't expecting that, since I haven't written poems for such a long time.
Thankyou for reading! ^_^
Wow. That was really good. When I read it, it had a gentle rocking motion for me. I like it. Scratch that. I love it!
You have a way with words. The descriptions were amazing.
That was great. Now start writing more!
I'm here if you need a reader.
~jumper
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