Jon

I was asked to review this by your friend Cat, so, here goes: You said you liked me, Then ask to be together First off, where is your period? It ...

Hi Dudette! Jon here! His hair was minimal; only covering the sides of his head though his moustache looked to have enough hair to coat the top of his head. ...

Hi Evi! Jon here! You're about to receive a Wise review! :lol: Looks like I'm critiquing my competition, I see. I've also entered their contest, well, I'm entering . The ...

Hey Rosey! Jon Here! How reminiscent of you, Rosey. :D Anyway! The review: Two years ago, I think a dash would have been better suited with the line above this ...

Hi Sinnful! Jon here! I don't know why you would choose this tale to describe 'listless'. This tale is about a man who sees himself in a puddle/pool and falls ...

Hi Dudette! Jon here! grinning madly at the TV screen whenever their face appears on it. This is good, but, maybe you could add some more words in there. Like ...

Hi, writing! I have to say that this had the best rhythm I've seen in a while. I love that. Anyway! Open the lock, think about, what would happen if ...

Hi, Play! I'm Jon. :D I have to say that I've never seen this style of format very often. (The long, spaced out lines). First I'm going to correct the ...

Hi, Mystymizer! I'm Jon. We keep falling backwards on all our regrets, Stepping around rotten petals of past (a past littered with deafened chords). I like this stanza for its ...

Hi Music! I'm Jon Why can't anyone sing for joy anymore? Where have all their voices gone? I think the first line is just a tad too long. I would ...

Thanks for doing it! :D This was really great, I got something from this poem that I haven't yet seen. (Thus the topics I choose for challenges) Anyway, right now ...

First off, give yourself some credit! I found this to be good, actually. Precious blackbird Of mourns and new adventures, Add that. Or, if not, put an apostrophe in mourn ...

New love blossoms and blooms The sweetest flower Take out "and blooms" and put a comma. In the second line in the beginning put "Growing" When you use blossoms and ...

I gave you the prompt, silly! Anyway, The magic of reality. The strangeness of dreams. I think you should give some more in the beginning, you're jumping right in. Maybe ...

Hi NightlyAngel! It's me, Jon. I thought I'd return the favor. :D Perhaps a few years from now, I shall see you, I like the thing your saying, but, I ...