Jon

Hey Pink! I'm Jon, Welcome to YWS! On top of calm waters guiding creatures through its swells I think 'its' should be 'it's'. :wink: I usually spot out quite a ...

Hi Phantom, I'm Jon! Let's make your cousin scream in terror, shall we? Haunting whispers of all kinds, A spider crawling up your spine, Cool breeze, a tight squeeze, Chills ...

Hi Brendan! Jon here! Memory sweet memory Shouldn't this be, "Memory, sweet memory"? :wink: It really does sound better with the comma there. An itch, a desperate lonely cold This ...

Hi Rose! I'm Jon! :D Death follows you like the wind... you never here it... you never see it... you never feel it... untill it;s next to you. I would ...

Wildwood, to Reply to a topic, you have to click 'Post Reply'. You accidentally hit the New Post button. But! Thanks for commenting on a piece, or trying to! :D

Hi Knightly! That imprison my heartstrings to you. Why would this "Force" imprison them? Love isn't supposed to be a prison, at least when it's real. (Their love seems real ...

Panatar knew better than to question Father's judgment, but Father seemed to be going slightly insane. If his father seemed to be going insane, why wouldn't he question it? I ...

Hi, Flemzo! I'm Jon! I like how you're always a phone call away, The person you are talking to is obviously dead. So, "You are" is not right. You could ...

Hi, I'm Jon! I hear the thunder, I hear the cries. I smell the burning as my past dies. I like the first line of this. However, the second line ...

Hi Music! Jon here! just look at me through your glass. This line is too long for the other ones and halts the flo a little, Instead of this, say, ...

Hi Carino! Jon here! Twigs: broken, scraggly, overflowing and messy, form a cage inside which the world has no sort of problems. In later stanzas you say that this nest ...

Hey, Adna! Okay, before I begin, this was two people talking, right? Can I have a bit of earth? It won’t forget the one who gave it Seeds to grow. ...

Hey, Eim! Make it mine Let me start off by saying that I love this line. It has a great rythm. all that you hold and see for those things ...

Hello, Aymeh! I'm Jon! This has zero reviews! I'll fix that! :D You've always been my weakness, right from the start. This line was good. However when you put in ...

Hi Peanut! I'm Jon! It has all been done before, every genre, every style, each idea, worked. Try to change some of your words here. You say "Every" two times ...