Hey Pink! I'm Jon, Welcome to YWS!
On top of calm waters guiding creatures through its swells
I think 'its' should be 'it's'.
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I usually spot out quite a few mistakes in poems, but I didn't here! I loved how you used the moonlight at night in this poem. However, I thought this poem could be expanded a lot more.
One thing that I noticed is that you have some good imagery. I also like the words you use in here, like, "Symphonic". Being that you use nice words, use some good audio throughout this piece. Have the bells ring a melody for the night. Have some flowers blossom. Have the moon light play on the pond across the way. There is so much that happens at night, use it. As this poem stands, it's just okay.
I think you picked a nice topic to write about, pink. I aslo think that you did it well. However, add more to this, there is a lot more you can add.
Anyway, welcome to YWS! I'll keep an eye out for your poems.
Good Job.
---Jon---
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