[quote=]Death follows you like the wind(.)
()you never here* it(,)<--- It should be "hear" the other one indicates location and delete the gap at the beginning as well as capitalize it.
you never see it(.)
(Y)ou never feel it
until it(')s next to you.
[/quote]
Sorry I couldn't help much with this poem. I have to eat dinner so I made it quick >< Since it seems you're into darker poems, why don't you check this one out
Click Here
It took a lot of work, but I think it was worth it.
Welcome to YWS by the way Glad to see a new member. Don't forget to introduce yourself in the welcome forum ^^
-Shina
Points: 4362
Reviews: 263
Donate