JohnLocke1

Wow. I really enjoyed this. From the moment I started reading, I wanted to know more about Regan and her life. I could hear Regan's voice in your writing. Your ...

First of all, I love Fantasy stories so please, tell me when you have written more. Your story: There is so much potential here for an amazing story. The prologue ...

The beginning to your story was interesting, but it become too confusing and hectic from then on. Work on organizing these grand ideas that you have so that your readers ...

The opening to this story shows me that you have mastered the art of the perfect introduction. You started with something so broad and so thrilling that no reader would ...

First: Grammatically, this is all over the place. There are too many errors to list, so I suggest going back and looking all over your sentences over for the tiny ...

I really liked your story. The word choices were top notch and the dialogue was actually believable. However, I would try to be clearer. I wasn't really sure what was ...

When you start the story, you really need to have something that grabs the readers attention. I really had no reason to continue reading the story. I mean, the girl ...

Wow. The way you brought the reader into this story was, honestly, pretty impressive. The words and the imagery made me really sad, but that's good! I had never thought ...

I don't really know how you are supposed to begin a review, so I will just start. First: Imagery is not a problem for you. I could see the landscape ...

I find it so difficult to give feedback on poetry because I believe that all that should matter to a poet is what he or she thinks, however the start ...

This was a nice story. I think the premise was sweet and the writing was clear. However, the dialouge was a tad bit unbelievable. When the mother gave that speech ...

I like simple and clear poems and this is a prime example. It is hard to review poems since there are so many different forms and styles, but I think ...

The writing form of the short story is one of the hardest to master. I hate reading short stories because I enjoy reading developed characters and developed plots. However, this ...

Wow. This actually reminded me of reading The Tell Tale Heart. Your imagery was scary to say the least. The word choices were perfect and I was very entertained with ...

I don't agree with criticizing since poetry lies in the heart of a writer, but I can still offer some advice. Throughout the lines of your poem, you seemed to ...