Poetry » Fantasy, Lyrical
Ironically I have only begun reading Alice in Wonderland this very day, And you have sold me on reading some more tomorrow. This poem strikes me as a kind of ...
Poetry » Realistic, General
Re: What Does it Mean to Dream
I recall Shakespeare in a sense. A simple yet profound message. Some dreams won't come true however that dose not mean we dream in vain. Interesante abstract. "What dose it ...
Poetry » Romantic, General
To have and Hold. This Poem is clearly about feelings of intimacy (or at least feelings of desiring intimacy). Overall I think you did a nice job capturing this emotion. ...
Short Story » Politics, Realistic
Re: A Letter To The Premier
This is an important message however to be honest I feel like the medium of letters kinda makes it awkward in some areas. Like the kids letters feel a bit ...
Poetry » Humor, Dramatic
Re: Athena: God of Poetic Justice
So greek mythology. Yet you are spelling god with a capital G for some reason. But honestly this is a pretty good poem. It very much feels like a new ...
Poetry » Lyrical, General
Re: A fighter
Okay I will preface this by saying that I am not personally a fan of rhyme poetry, It always feels constricting to me. But this is a good poem. "Big ...
Poetry » Lyrical, Dramatic
Re: Poetry is Everything Never Said
So True. Now I am noticing this trend on the YWS that people will publish photos of their poems rather than retype them at the publishing center. And I am ...
Poetry » Romantic, Science Fiction
Re: When the world has burned
A Fascinating picture of the end. I find references to the threat of Climate change coupled with an almost Biblical tone regarding the end. This poem feels like someone saying ...
Poetry » Satire, Realistic
Re: Time Management is Extinct
I like how the text is all in one big blurb because that visually drives the point of Time management being extinct. Almost like this was rushed itself. But I ...
Poetry » General, General
Re: The Glass of Soda
A contemporary reminder of old writer. I will admit that I am not familiar with Proust's work myself but I can pick up on what a love letter this poem ...
Poetry » Dramatic, General
It's good. The Rhyming kinda distracted me at first but I eventually got used to it. It feels like you are using familiar things to describe an abstract emotion. There ...
Poetry » General, General
Re: Olympic Somonka: The Mirror
I am reminded of Hans Christian Andersens "The Snow Queen" which featured a magic mirror that would only reflect the worst aspects of a person. I personally have not read ...
Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic
Re: You’re gone
Implied suicide. You gave us a fair warning at the beginning. This poem possess al lot of Pathos and vulnerability but also a sense of uniformity. You repeat the phrase ...
Poetry » Dramatic, Science Fiction
Re: Broken World
wow this is something Thought-Provoking. The description makes me recall Norse Mythology. "As the Universe shakes the dew from IT IS fur." yeah this feels like a Ragnorok. This is ...
Short Story » Health, Narrative
Re: Waking up.
Mental illness is not portrayed in the media too often. You preface this story by informing people that you yourself suffer from OCD and Schizophrenia. It is good that you ...