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A Letter To The Premier

by saadamansayyed


Author's Note

This story is comprised of the heart-wrenching tales of three Grade 5 students from Australia, impacted by the terrible effects of climate change and wildfires.

Note that this happens every year, and we need to stop messing with the environment, because this is a global issue. It is simply devastating.

Thank you.

THE LETTERHEAD

Thea B.M. Astley Primary School,

309 Priestdale Road, Rochedale

Brisbane, QLD, Australia 4123

Premier of Queensland Anne Pilwurst

1, William Street,

Brisbane, QLD, Australia 4000

Dear Premier of Queensland,

This is Karen Bitterbeck, and I am the class teacher and social studies teacher of Grade Five A at the Thea B.M. Astley Primary School. I and my students request you to give immediate attention and priority to the inscribed later. These all are normal, Australian children who’ve been seeing the terrible effects of climate change. As you might know, the wildfires some weeks ago destroyed all of us Aussies psychologically and physically. When these guys came up with their incidents, I had to send it to you.

Amelia

Dear Premier,

My name is Amelia Lionheart. I am ten years old, and I live with my dear mother in a revolting apartment in the more appalling areas of this city.

I was seven when my parents divorced. We used to live in a small home by the beach in Sydney. My mother is from Brisbane, and she came here shortly after she divorced my father. For a few months, we lived in an apartment before moving into a massive bungalow. It was tall and wide, stretching the width of six school buses. In it was a huge yard that was full of shrubs, trees and other little plants. The carpet of grass was pleasant to step on, and the smell of the flowers near the fences was saccharine. In the house were the finest wooden furniture and the latest electronics. The flooring was made specifically in a factory in Europe for this particular home. The light azure of the wall gave the home a cool vibe.

When the wildfires came, it all changed. As the fire engulfed the house, everything was demolished. The lawn was brown and disgusting, the tiles were all burnt, the furniture was now ash, the gizmos were not functioning, and the walls were all broken. My mom ran to rescue me, and burnt parts of her left leg, making her decapitated for a while. All this was traumatizing. My sweet home was all but ash in a matter of a few hours.

We stayed in a hotel for a few days before we found a home. The new home was very unappealing. The smell of rancid meat almost killed me. The noises and sound was enough to make human skulls break, and the technology was old. People said unpleasant things, and we knew this, because the walls were thin and their paint was cracking. And if you'd put anything more than a hundred kilos on those tiles, that'd sink all the way to the bottom. My mother lost her job, and the new job didn't give us much.

I am going to beat around the bush - that destroyed how we lived. While we certainly can survive, it was never the bare minimum. And it is not just a terrible home, it also makes you uneasy and reminds you of very unpleasant things.

Yours Sincerely,

Amelia Lionheart (5A)

Monty

Dear Premier,

My name is Mandeep Singh Kapoor, Monty, for short, and my family is destroyed. I mean destroyed.

I study in class 5 like all 10 or 11 year olds do, and I really enjoy playing sports. You can’t play sports when your father is angry, though.

It was a few months ago when “the thing” happened. You see, my father runs the Indian Food Company all throughout the country, and what he does - I don’t really know because he talks in really hard words or Punjabi (I don’t understand either) when he’s working. Basically though, he just trades corn and stuff. Grains, like Mr. Huang's science class, taught us.

Now, coming back to the foodstuff, He has this really big warehouse in Geelong, in Victoria. It is a pretty place, and we went to Melbourne too, with Papa. Back to Geelong, there is where he stores all this stuff that comes from the farmers in NSW and our state Queensland and then they store it until it is given to people in Adelaide, Tas, Perth, Hobart, ACT, and Darwin.

So, it was this really hot summer going on, I think it was just 29th November then, but still, really hot, and then, there was this sudden flood. And all of the grains were just poof - gone! Now it certainly made us tight on money, but there was an even worse thing.

My papa’s been really sick since the “incident”. I mean, he even had a small heart attack! That’s not right, okay? My papa getting heartattack is not OK. He has also gotten himself tons of other bad stuff. He has High BP, sugar - and he’s not been eating properly. It is a bit funny, but my grandmother thinks that papa is in shock. Maybe, he is.

Do you want people to die because some vile companies couldn’t do with like, $2 less in profit? I dunno man, you guys need to do some serious thinking.

Yours Truly,

Mandeep Singh (5A)

Ashley

Dear Premier,

My name is Ashley Kanter, I am 10 years old and I come from a small village in New South Wales. The only reason I am here, studying at the T.B.M.A. Primary. Gosh, I could’ve been studying in school with my friends and in December, at the barbie. None of that happened, and that's really ain’t a beauty.

Three years ago, I remember it was a good time. My dad was downing a coldie, and my mom and I were at the barbie making hot dogs. It was right around Chrissie, and we were really happy. I was wearing overalls over daks, what a dag! I was also playing footy, if I remember correctly.

Fast forward to today, and we barely celebrated Chrissie. And that's not all, I’ve had little time to talk to Dad about anything at all. He’s dang busy with all his stuff. Y’know, in the mornings, he’s at the community garden, as a gardener. Then, he comes here for dinner, and then off he goes for his duty as a security guard and comes home at like 1 in the midnight. And, on weekends, he’s outta town working as a tourist guide. I’ve got three baby bros - 3, 1, and 7-month old Matthew, Elliot and Karl. All of them need attention, and my mom cannot give that to me.

Most families of my cobbers here, they got game nights every single Friday. And what do I get? Nothing. NO family time, like at all. Now, all of you might be wondering, how did this happen?

The last-to-last summer, it was just bad. Superbad. I hated it. All these dingos and ostriches would just ravage the barn and the farm. He was slowly sinking. And last summer, the coppers told us that we’d need to go. It was all over. He’s in massive debt, and all I just want is gone. Just gone. I hate it.

Now, Premier ma’am, I just wanna be quick and honest with ya - you gotta stop putting the bails on people’s lives. I hate how our life is now.

Thank you,

Ashley Kanter (5A)

Closing Remarks 

Ma’am, I hope you’ve read what the kids wrote. Its really, really important that action is taken now, before everything’s just out of hand. When the kids gave me their letters, I wasn’t sure you were the person to mail it to. But when I read those, I cried. I don't do that often. I cried a lot. But as I put the stamp on this, I’m sure you’re just the right gal. So, ma’am, just read it.

Karen C. Bitterbeck,

On behalf of the three students,

Thea BM Astley Primary, Brisbane


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Sun Sep 12, 2021 2:49 pm
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MC
To: saadamansayyed
I like this piece of work you made. It tells issues that are happening in Australia since the bushfires of 2020, the issue that still happen, what the world is leading to.
I like how you used some of the Australian slang which I really appreciated and adds character to the writers of the letter and further cementing where they are and what backgrounds they are from.
Although I feel as though the three kids were way too formal and weren't acting or speaking like children in grade 5.
Other than that that's all I got to say this is pretty good. I hope to see more for you.
Thank you
From - MC (SA. Not really)




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This is an important message however to be honest I feel like the medium of letters kinda makes it awkward in some areas.

Like the kids letters feel a bit too descriptive. And the way that they are writing out their sadness.

I honestly feel like this medium kinda interferes with the tone. I understand that it is supposed to be a first person account of climate change. Kinda like how Annie Frank was a first person of the holocaust. But I just feel like since these are the accounts of multiple people they are less flushed out. Also they are writing these letters after the fact. They just sound a bit too credible despite being children. They also feel a bit too cynical for children, But that may just be because these letter are addressed to someone in power. I don't know I just think it would be more heartbreaking/realistic if the children had more blind optimism. Also the slang can be kind distracting at times. So maybe you could leave some notes about the dialect to help the UNaustralian people of the world.

Okay so now some stuff I enjoyed.

1. The slang, Yeah I know I kinda complained about it before but it really dose give this story a unique identity. It very much reminds me of the slang in The adventure of Tom Sawyer. Australian Tom Sawyer is the objectively a great idea.

2. The setting, this is one of those stories that is tied to its environment. As a boy in Wonderbread U.S.A. it is rare that I get the chance to see Oceanic culture. It is horribly uncommon to find any media that takes place in Australia. Therefore I am left wondering
"What are they doing down there?". Your story doesn't just take place it Australia it takes advantage of that setting. Implementing cultural elements, slang, traditions and political issues.

3. The social commentary, Though this was one aspect that I more harshly criticized I actually really like that you are drawing attention to this issue. And the way you do so by drawing attention to the people affected by them It's just genius. As previously mentioned I live in Wonderbread U.S.A and it is much easier to over look Climate change when you live in Wonderbread U.S.A because Wonderbread U.S.A is not close to any ice caps or poles. Therefore climate change is an issue that unfortunately falls into the "It Can't Happen Here!" bucket. The fact that this story shows normal people getting hurt because of this--. That is different.

4. Ashley, This girl is my favorite character. She is sarcastic. She is tired. She is a real kid. Honestly I wish this story was just all about her.

Overall I see a lot of promise.
Sorry if I was a bit negative at the beginning.
I just feel the story could focus more on people dealing with the problems and less about the people who cause the problem.

I wish you the best. And I look forward to what more you could say about the state of Australia.
Goodbye




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FourLeafClover says...



This is a really important thing for people to be knowing about it, so thank you for sharing this with people on YWS. The more people who know about it, the more people will be able to take action. Thanks for sharing!






Thank you, FourLeafClover. I know right? :)




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