JadeBunny

JadeBunny here with a review! I felt that you did a good job keeping your story at a fast pace. The writing style helped tremendously, using simple yet clearly descriptive ...

Hola there! Jade here with a review! The writing style seems to be very plain. with lots of telling instead of showing. However, it gets the point across well. I ...

It's Jade again! "She and her mother, alone, were the only dwellers of the manor, save for the butler, Uncle Castle. " Shouldn't that be "inhabitants" instead of "dwellers"? Because ...

Hi there. JadeBunny here with a review! One thing I noticed about this story is that there were many typos and grammatical errors. For example, you misspelled "sloping countryside" as ...

Jade here with a review! First of all, there are a few typos, like "drag doll" instead of "rag doll". Some of the words, such as "crashedinto" and "crateand" seem ...

Jade's review of Buddy (or Zombro) I really like this poem! It's very humorous and clever, and I love the idea of a person befriending a zombie. The ending made ...

How did you get the font to look like that? I'm kind of confused what the poem is about, because of your choice of words, but I think it is ...

This is a really good prologue! There were some grammatical errors, like “But perhaps one day in the future, one of you, will be able to find it. Any more ...

I was tapping my beak against the shell that surrounded me. Um, don't birds use their egg teeth to break their eggs? "I recommend you to not touch that, young'un." ...

I wonder why there is so much space between the paragraphs. Also, why is everything in italics? This prologue really catches my attention, and I want to know more about ...

I really like this poem. The rhythm is mostly smooth and kind of catchy in my opinion, and the rhymes are mostly good too, if a little forced. It's not ...

This sounds so interesting! I love alternate history/universe stories (I'm currently writing a story set in alternate New York City), and I can't wait to read the rest of it! ...

The rhyme scheme was very good, and the rhythm was too! I was a bit confused, and I don't really get the 10th line. What do you even mean by ...

Bahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha! This is the funniest poem I have ever read in my life! You are an excellent poet, Kyllorac. Also, the rhythm is almost perfect! You tried a little too ...

You misspelled "Prologue" and there are some confusing sentences. For example, These were rare and dangerous gifts that one should have the responsibility to control one of the four main ...