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Sarah Dessen is amazing. I read Dreamland in middle school without knowing I was reading her stuff, then I got into again earlier this year, read the rest of her ...

My name is Erakigrasto, but you can call me Coal as all the other humans do. I wasn't even going to try pronouncing his real name, so I started referring ...

"So," he said shortly. "So what?" I snapped back at him. She really does have anger problems huh? He simply melted through the bark and melted back through the other ...

I only call her Sappy. "I only call her Sappy," and "Only I call her Sappy," have two different meaning. See it? “Oh, your into that are you?” You're “Lets ...

“So, your not going to be good,” , should be a . you got it right in all the others, 'cept this one. I hated to think his bastard was ...

We sat on the school field, tugging at the grass. We hated P.E, we really did, but in some ways it was the best because we got to muck around. ...

“I have to go home,” And with those words... The A in and should be lowercase. “Ok…talk to you later then, call you Saturday or something bye!”. I know old ...

“Your just so cute..." Should be you're I like this, once again, muchos too short, but I still love where you're taking the story. I agree with Alainna, there could ...

Anthropomorphism. Wow...BIG word!! hehe. I should add that to my vocabulary...and keep it. It's just that impressive. As for Animal Farm, I've read it. Knowing before hand what it was ...

Hmmm...let's start this party with some boxes!!!! this little tale; He was desperate for a way out... Incorrect use of the semicolon! The semicolon has two main purposes: 1. It ...

CAPS BUG DONT THEY???? WHEN YOU SEE THEM ON A PAGE, YOU JUST ZERO IN ON THEM, UNTIL YOU CANT CONCENTRATE ON THE ACTUAL story BUT WHAT'S DIFFERENT ABOUT THE ...

AH! Just when you thought I had something against boxes!!!! The boy dropped me on the ground, and although it hurt, I managed to shrink away from him on the ...

Really isn't much I can say that hasn't already been said. So, I guess I'll go with my thoughts on the story...seeing as that's what a critique is right??? Now, ...

this section is really, really short. You might want to add in some dialouge between Chris and Rob, to show how detached from them Jaimy feels, or a conversation between ...

“I feel ill,” I let my eyes wander across his face, deliberately letting him know that he was the source of my sudden illness. Rob nudged my leg under the ...