Incandescence

Perhaps I've listened to too much Switchfoot, but blowing up into a million pieces wasn't all that original. I think you would more likely disintegrate than anything. :shrugs: I like ...

Paris Hilton...well, I didn't watch her video or anything, but I really dislike how she used it to pump her and her tv shows up. It was stupid, and I ...

The ending was crappy. I liked the poem, especially whenever it came off as a monologue, but after reading some of your other work, I think this is not quite ...

The repetition of Blue created nothing but an annoyance in this poem. It should have been a lot better than it was. The word "assaults" was awkward and "different" was ...

Meh. I wasn't thrilled with this piece to any reasonable extent. It falls into the class of mediocricity. "Solarflares" was an excellent demonstration of syntax and gave me an image, ...

Could this have been any worse? Your syntax was overused and should have been revised with more vivid words. Stop describing the way an event occurs and describe why it ...

This was very good for a play. My only criticism is the title of the play. It sounds so far-fetched that I almost didn't read it. Of course, you're not ...

I want to say it touched me, but I felt detatched from the whole thing. And yes, the ending should be strengthened for a more powerful clasp on your reader's ...

I didn't like this as much as I did Cyber. It just lacked all forms of imagery whatsoever. Not good. I think this was also done in an interesting way, ...

This is cliche no matter what I'm about to say, but this touched me in a certain way. It seemed a bit darker and reached out to me, probably because ...

This is very immature. The topic is, well, badly presented. True, you did personify greed, which is a step, but this is not what I would consider mediocre. This is ...

This was weak. Real weak. As is most of your other poetry, for that matter. I suggest you stop writing about something that already has millions of poems. It's time ...

This was as blunt as the day is long. Enough with the suicidal poems and poems about death and hurt. If you've written a poem about suicide for every person ...

This was a typical I-Wanna-Rant-Against-My-Parents Stop-Smothering-Me. It's unfortunate you have these feelings, but so does everybody else. Your job as a writer is to make something that captures the

Whoa... Image overload. Not a bad thing, but it's hard to follow the poem with so many colors popping into and out of existence all at once. The point of ...