Perhaps I've listened to too much Switchfoot, but blowing up into a million pieces wasn't all that original. I think you would more likely disintegrate than anything. :shrugs: I like it, but it could've done more for the reader. I like eye candy when I read my poems, and knowing what the poem was about was the only way I got that. I think it had some images, but my view was tainted from reading your disclaimer at top. I don't like words and phrases like "explode," "burning," and "blinding." Mostly cause I see them everywhere. I didn't get the tension as one of the commenters claimed, either. I just got a kind of unambiguous relief, in the best sense of the word. I wasn't relieved to be through or anything, I was just unambiguously relieved that it was over. I can see the tension, but it's a false tension. Because you give your poem nowhere else to go, any form of tension vanishes from the poem. I don't know, do what you will. I've no further comments. Good day.
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