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Re: Deleted 44
Hi! I haven't been on here for a while so here goes! First of all, I love your unconventional writing style. You've pulled off some great images and meaning without ...
Aug 20, 2014 -
Re: The worst time to encounter an earthquake is when you are riding a bike.
This is fantastic! It has a sporadic rhythm that seems to actually capture the vibrations of an earthquake. I especially liked "Molten consonants apocalyptic". The way that tumbles off the ...
Jan 30, 2014 -
Re: Abortion
I find this extremely offensive. Reading your essay literally made me feel sick. How dare you judge people like this? Do you know what percentage of children put up for ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Flakes
Sorry about my blank reply before! It was a mistake >.> But on to the poem! This is stunning! Your meticulously crafted imagery and wordplay is delightful :) I especially ...
Jan 19, 2014 -
Re: I Attempt To Describe The Wind
Hello! You remind me of my one friend from Ireland, but if she and Shel Silverstein were mixed together like yogurt. Anyway, review! I've noticed some other people mentioned that ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: from polluted hearts and skyscrapers
Hi Sophiewrites! Thanks for your review before! This is a seriously gorgeous piece. The images and feelings really hit home, and it sounds very genuine, like it's coming from your ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: Dream: Blue Embers
This is absolutely amazing. The description of the forest being filled and destroyed with smoke is beautiful, and the colors are really working for you. I'd love to read more ...
Apr 5, 2012 -
Re: ...
First of all, let me say that this is absolutely beautiful. I almost don't want to review it. (((All of my comments look like this.))) The small house is lit ...
Mar 26, 2012 -
Re: Bloody Raven
(((All my comments look like this))) It was as if all that happened was yesterday. A nightmare. A dream. The truth. (((The truth? But you were just describing it as ...
Mar 26, 2012 -
Re: Wake Up And Smell The Coffee
I like this. It's almost satiric, and it grabs you. Just a suggestion: you might want to look at the second sentence, the part about money feels a little choppy. ...
Mar 25, 2012 -
Re: Decaying Thoughts of a Blooming mind
One quick thing: it's "disintegrates" not "disintergrates". Great read. I like the on and off rhymn scheme, and the imagery is beautiful. My favorite line is "lifted palms, resting crows;". ...
Mar 21, 2012 -
Re: Crumpled Note
Nice beginning, grabbed me right from the first line. This poem reminded me a lot of my friend who's in a band, and I found it very relatable. Just a ...
Mar 20, 2012 -
Re: so, it's true
(((All off my comments start and end like this))) So, it’s true? says Jade. Yea, dad, it’s true, says Jay. And you just figured it out this last year? It ...
Mar 18, 2012
