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This is absolutely amazing. The description of the forest being filled and destroyed with smoke is beautiful, and the colors are really working for you. I'd love to read more of your work.
Only thing I'm a little confused about it the cigarrette laying in the floor in the beginning. I got the impression that the cigarrette had already been used and you were about to stomp it out or something, but then you apparently start smoking with it. It's a pretty minor detail, maybe just add a sentence about you picking it up?
Sorry, I made a mistake. My bad.
Anyway, this poem rocks
That was the earliest part of the dream. Since I don't smoke I'm curious why and how it showed up too.