Hey! Forever here with a review!!
Oh this was a very creepy piece here. I too often have this fear of something unknown, of something which is not present, which I know is not going to do something to me. So, this was a bit relatable. I wouldn’t say completely relatable though. Anyway, into the review now.
So from what I understood, it stands like this: The narrator saw a nightmare yesterday and since then they are quite farid that something/someone is on their way to hurt her and hurt her children too. To be honest, I really wanted a glipse of that dream. It can actually help us to understand the work a lot better and comprehend the fear of the person a bit better.
When you are narrating from first person narrative, it’s not the wisest thing to keep a lot of secrets from the readers. It wouldn’t set a good example of the narrator there. Maybe if you don’t want to provide the whole dream, you could give bits of infos and then just write that she was not being able to think more because of her panic. That wouldn’t be a bad thing to do.
Next we come to the actual plot of the play. You managed to create a good mystery and a feeling of horror when you said that one of the children wanted to hear horror stories. The genre of the stories the chilfren wanted to hear actually helped in the plot a lot. Though she didn’t tell the story to her, we can understand what her life has been. I mean romance+horror. It sounds like a very intriguing thing. Good job on providing us with information without mentioning them directly! Seems like the person was a real one. The rain, lightning- everything creates a perfect atmosphere for a horror story. And then the person came in and if I am not much mistaken, the person went ahead and murdered all three of them. I liked the open ending though!
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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