Gravity

Wow. Just... wow. You have floored me. I am a Christian, so I completely understand the morality debate between homo and bisexuality and what's right and wrong. So, you did ...

Okay, so I do have a few nitpicks. Right here "A monster they've made out of me," Both thought, struck with fear, "A piece in their games. They've taught me ...

I'm finding some errors, and just some awkward nitpicks. I love the idea of writing a letter in poem format. But you didn't do a great job explaining what a ...

I'm not quite sure what this poem is about. I think you should add in some more punctuation, commas would be helpful. If you won't do this, at least capitalize ...

Well. That's um... AWESOME! I have a few nitpicks. 1. What are the numbers for? Do they begin a new poem or what? 2. When you say "God", "God" is ...

Palindromes are obviously becoming a fad on YWS. I like this, the only nitpick I have is the third line "That with time, I could be more-" Try taking out ...

Okay Miss ConverseFireGirl. I must scold you. TSK TSK!!! You spend so much time telling everybody how amazing their work is and God knows you've commented on my wall enough ...

I loved this. I thought the repetition was amazing and @Ossum I think this is something you would really enjoy reading. I loved how short and simple and to the ...

Can I cry now? The only nitpick I have is the first paragraph. I mean generally just sleeping The word "literally" would go better in place of generally. You captured ...

Hiya! This poem was deeply touching. The loss of a best friend can really hurt. At first when you began the poem, I thought it was going to be about ...

I love this poem. I completely disagree with the school systems in the USA. I thought this poem was amazing, it captured all of the negative feelings I have about ...

I loved this poem! It gave me goosebumps (but that might be because the classroom I'm sitting in is freezing) but regardess, bravo! You have managed to confuzzle me! So ...

This is a shorter poem, so I have a few nitpicks, but not many. I feel that your poem was lacking from punctuation. I think you should've added that in ...

I think other people who reviewed this had a point. I felt like throughout the lyrics, you had an ABAB forced rhyme. It felt like you were rhyming just to ...

Oh my gosh, I wish you would've commented on my wall. I'm so sorry I didn't get to read this until now. This is amazing! It's wonderful! It's perfection. But ...