GoldFlame

Hello! (It's been two years since my last review, so feel free to let me know if anything needs clarifying. ^^) The writing possessed a really nice rhythm. The backstory ...

Hello! I didn't originally intend to review this, but I wanted to pause before consuming more chapters and scribble some thoughts down and um, warning for illegibility You're taking fantasy ...

Back again! I'm going to start with the negatives and end with the positives. (Also, heads up in advance for a technical review, which I'll try to compensate for with ...

Hey, Fall! (Apologies in advance for any awkward phrasing; I'm a bit rusty with writing.) My nightlight is old, with a yellow glow, not like those new ones in bright ...

Heya! (My writing/reviewing skills are a bit rusty, so apologies in advance for any incoherence.) Negatives first! In the twenty-four years I’ve lived, I have never lit a single cigarette. ...

Heya! (Heads up, my reviewing skills are rusty, so things may be a bit jumbled.) Inside, my heart beat wildly, when I’d open my eyes again, I’d be in another ...

Heya! (This review may be in shards because I wrote it over the course of several weeks, so erm, beware of canines.) Additional note: After this chapter I'll skip to ...

Heya! I'll just brush over the technical stuff quickly: the night-workers This can be unhyphenated ( Link thingy on when to hyphenate compound words . The meat of the article ...

Heya! This one, in particular, was especially not comical-looking. Redundancy: "in particular" and "especially." You seem to favor appositive and parenthetical phrases, which are great for fluency; th

Back again! I'll try to brush over the nitpicks quickly--gah, I'm so reluctant to criticize this. It's definitely one of my favorites, where the story and style really clicked. Night ...

Back again! Being thrown into Malkolm's perspective was a bit startling, considering I'd just barely gotten to understand Elborn; the exposition lasted for less than three thousand words. The voices ...

Heya! Nitpicks and then overall thoughts: Elborn walked slowly, feet thumping on the carpet. "Feet thumping" feels a bit extraneous; it doesn't contribute new information or strengthen the atmosphere.

Heya! Sorry about the lateness. >.> (Fantasy's a bit out of my comfort zone, so there may be some general obtuseness or an inability to articulate thoughts--feel free to correct ...

Hey, Dracula! Happy Review Day! Ideas received in dreams are the best; dreams underline everything with a poetic quality. (I'll try to scribble down my thoughts as I read, which ...

Hey, Fire! Happy Review Day! This definitely demonstrates writing skill. The pace was well-measured, the imagery's clean and efficient, and there's a distinct rhythm to the words. I didn't have ...