Gabriellemarice99

I always have such trouble with haiku *sigh*, however you did way better than me! You did mess up with the syllables witch I always manage to do. You think ...

Hello I know I'm a little late but I saw you post the 3rd chapter and I wanted to start at the beginning so here I am :D. I love ...

The introduction to the prologue seems a little dull I love the analogy regarding the men being like children perhaps you could build a bit more on that. Your sentence ...

Some may say it's better when someone you once loved is moving far away, But it sucks in reality. Now I can't hope that maybe I'll bump into you at ...

It was very interesting but I feel its incomplete. You have a ending that's a really good idea but i would have put something about him morn her death but ...

I love the beautiful story line developing here its very engrossing. My biggest issue is I see a little character development from Kevin but not from Beth and Jason. That ...

Have you ever read any of Ellen Hopkins books? If not I strongly suggest it for the simple fact that she is where I learned to tell stories in my ...

I am not much into screen plays but my best friend writes a shit load of them and I'm very impressed! You have a good introduction that you can expand ...

Not to be rude but it sounds like you made a twist to the new snow white movie that came out that has Kristina Stewart in it. IF THAT'S NOT ...

I love it the introduction is so intriguing however i would suggest stopping after “I can’t do this – I'm sorry I can’t…” it would leave the reader a reason ...

Well then... interesting idea here but I don't personally think this is a good topic to write on because you want to appeal to an audience and many people would ...

I love this for several reasons. 1~ The topic is relatable so you are reaching a wide audience. 2~ The experience discussed is personal so the feelings are expressed in ...

I like it so far :) I notices a few things like you use faster than the blink of an eye a few times, try expanding your figurative language a ...

I think you did we'll considering you aren't writing from experience! It's very difficult to discus a topic we ourselves are unfamiliar with! You are writing to be relatable and ...

I understand where you're coming from with the whole guy you wish you'd never met thing ha I have loads of poems about that! I think this has a lot ...