Flyingsquirrel42

Hey JenTep! This is a great story. Ryan's inner battle between choosing his girlfriend or his friend who he's becoming attracted to is apparent yet subtle, which is awesome. That ...

Hi! First off, I love this poem. The rhythm is great and I'm always impressed when people can figure out rhymes such as these. There's just one stanza in particular ...

Hey Carlito! Quick disclaimer: I haven't read the rest of When I Was Anna, so this review may not be as helpful as I don't want to assume too much. ...

Hey Lionhero333! Kudos to you for writing such a long piece! Just a few grammar things to note. First, dialogue grammar! Comma goes inside the quotation marks and there's no ...

Hi Bellarke! First off, this is a really great piece. There are just a couple things I would change. The main issue in terms of word choice is concentrated at ...

Hi Honora! Your writing is getting better with each chapter and they're fun to read! Katie is really starting to develop her own voice, which is great. Again, the majority ...

A few grammatical errors, but otherwise just as good as your other works! The characters' thoughts are realistic and they're all becoming distinct from each other and interesting, which I ...

This is just as good as 1.1! Your description of when the group of guys took her down and Vitruvius drank her blood was detailed and really helped me visualize ...

This is one of the most relatable pieces I've ever read, so great job connecting with people here! Some things I would change: ‘Great, this is where I die,’ I ...

First off, this doesn't seem like a rough piece to me. I think it's pretty good, especially since you're saying this is a new genre for you. The majority of ...

First off, this is a great poem. I like the title and the beginning draws me right in - it's the complete opposite of what I would have expected. I ...

For a seven-year-old, this is an impressive story! Things I liked: - The idea is original and has a lot of potential - The characters' emotions are realistic Things I ...

This is just as good as the previous chapter of Marked. Great job on gradually introducing information! I'm always impressed when writers manage to do that without using an info-dump. ...

This is such a good piece. Things I liked: -The ending. Oh my goodness. It wrapped up everything nicely. -The way you were able to show Jay growing older without ...

Wow. I love the descriptions of the trees as if they were more than just...trees. It makes me think of them in a new way. I really like how you ...