Firepower13

This made me so sad. :( In a good way, though; I really felt like I could sympathize with this little essay and the character in it. It is excellent ...

Lovely little composition you have here! I do feel you could have expressed it better in a poem or as the theme of a short story, because when you have ...

BEAUTIFUL imagery. I loved the themes woven into this poem and the way you managed to translate them into lovely metaphors and such. I don't really have anything bad to ...

As before, this is creeeepy. Your five year old narrator does seem to be surprisingly articulate for her age, as you accidentally draw attention to. Not that it matters that ...

Creeeeepy. I like it. Have a cookie (::) The idea of nightmares being real is a tried and true formula, especially when applied to children. It also always manages to ...

Hi! As you asked, I will rip this apart for you. You know, since that's what you wanted. The idea here is solid, but you have a few really big ...

Very creative poem here! I haven't been doing many reviews because I'm saving them for later on Review Day, but I want to get this one out of the Green ...

Yo my name is Firepower and I'm here to be critical of your heartfelt emotions that you were brave enough to post on the Internet where anyone can get at ...

God this is dark and depressing. Especially that ending. Jesus. I like it. The sentences aren't capitalized, but I assume that was a style choice on your part as opposed ...

This gave me serious déjà vu to a time I passed out from dehydration and exhaustion and fell down some stairs. It was a lot like what you describe and ...

Hello, Firepower here! I'm just writing a review. I loved this, because I really liked some of the connections you made in this poem. The second to last stanza was ...

This was good! I liked reading the more colorful descriptions- I felt like there could have been more of them, actually, because Wonderland is one of the more colorful and ...

This is an adorable poem. I like your theme, about people not understanding that you're caring and trying to help when you tell on them. I have a little brother ...

Hi! I'm Firepower, and this, as you have probably already guessed, is your review! I love metaphorical poems. You use rain to symbolize how our human perspective of it changes ...

Interesting idea you have here. I don't want to complain about the theme or pacing of the poem because I think it's solid enough already, but there are a few ...