I
The first rains wash us in infancy,
A sort of natural Baptism.
They help us germinate, establish our roots,
Break through the soil and
Look up at the Sun.
We continue to grow, and play in the puddles the rain makes until it’s time to go back inside.
II
The second rains come with some turbulence.
In come winds of Change and Confusion and find that rain
Can be cold.
Rain takes on a different quality
We start to notice new dimensions, new facets in each drop, each storm
Kind of like us.
III
The third rains bring a new sense of identity
And we see the world with a newfound clarity
Storms are merely the disturbance of the normal conditions of the atmosphere—
The trembling drops that accompany the butterflies in our stomachs like a sort of ballet—
Soft, graceful, sweet.
But leaping, soaring, spiraling, and then—
Cloudburst.
IV
The fourth rains,
We don’t have time for.
Aggravating,
Insulting in the way they seem to appear right when you need to get somewhere, almost as if the sky takes time out of its schedule
To ruin ours.
Adam’s ale?
If it was up to us, we’d empty the damned thing
Right into the drain, for all it’s worth.
Yet,
In those rare moments alone,
Nothing but the marauding thoughts in our heads,
We find that Adam’s ale can be absolving:
Healing old wounds,
Bringing back life to the parts of us that we believed dead.
Catharsis.
V
In the fifth rains we find gratitude,
And an appreciation for the magnificence of life
That we always wished we’d had when we were younger—
Because we haven’t got many rains left.
We learn to dance and jump in the puddles again
Reveling in the pseudo waves you create in those makeshift brines
Because it’s okay to get your feet wet sometimes.
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Hello! I am a poet and I found yours particularly entrancing. I love how you created your poem using an extended metaphor. I really love poetry that gives you a different perspective of objects and you hit that extremely well. However, you used some words that I don't understand: Part 3- the use of Cloudburst, & Part 4- the relation Adam's ale and Catharsis have with life and rain. Also, Part V, line 3, I think you meant "That always we wished we'd had when we were younger--"
Hi! Thank you so much!!

Part 3- Cloudburst was just like heavy rainfall, representing how in our teens, everything is so full of passion- love, heartbreak, all that.
Part 4- Well, Adam's ale is just another description of Rain, a biblical allusion if you will. Alcohol can be intoxicating, dis-inhibiting, and sometimes has medicinal value. SO the rain & the alcohol serve as an analgesic, both physically and emotionally. Purging bad feelings and helaing old wounds to bring a sense of renewal, thus the 'catharsis'.
Part 5: oh, poop. I missed that. thanks for catching that!!
@princesssparkles13
Hi! I'm Firepower, and this, as you have probably already guessed, is your review!
I love metaphorical poems. You use rain to symbolize how our human perspective of it changes as we age, and it's beautiful, actually. I really enjoyed reading this. You nailed the identities of every age group pretty much dead-on.
In the early parts of the poem, you capitalize a couple words, like baptism, and change. I'm not sure if this was on accident or just to make them seem more important, although I'm leaning towards the second one.
Also, I'm not particularly sure why you posted this in bold, since it can be a little harsh on the eyes, but I suppose that could just be a style choice.
Ah! the bold font was actually an accident xD
@Firepower13
Thank you so much for your review, it means a lot to me!
Yes, the capitalization was a stylistic choice