"A liberdade de um acaba quando a do outro começa". Se liberdade vem de livre e livre é algo que não tem limites como é que liberdade acaba?
Quando a escravatura acabou ou os portugueses deram fim à dinastia filipina, houve quem achasse que tinha achado a liberdade, mas não passava de uma ilusão desta. Porque ao sair de uma opressão submetemo-nos a outra prisão. Porque temos quem nos coloque leis que nos impedem de fazer desejadas acções.
Não há nada que mais desejamos do que adquirir a liberdade, mas como a temos se podemos ser controlados por um génio maligno ou submetidos às leis da Natureza? Por mais que andemos só alcançamos metade do caminho do destino.
À medida que o tempo passa afastamo-nos mais do objectivo. Porque o homem submetido às suas características, o único ser que possui o conceito racional, conquistou terrenos e impôs governos, deixámo-nos de nómadas para sermos cidadãos.
Tenho sincera pena de viver nesta época, onde já adquiriram muito conhecimento do mundo e omitem-nos a verdade. Onde somos controlados por redes sociais e pela tecnologia. Onde nos conectam a todos mas tratam-nos como números, como peças de xadrez para concedermos benefícios para as suas ambições. Onde pensamos que a vida baseia-se em estudar coisas que o homem criou, em aprendermos a viver no mundo que o humano impôs, a trabalhar com empregos que nos dão estatuto social, para ganhar o que é preciso para a nossa própria sobrevivência.
A ignorância é o que realmente queremos ter como característica, pois impede-nos de sabermos o que é realmente liberdade, pois assim realmente acharemos que somos livres, mas só assim chegamos ao mais perto que conseguimos da liberdade.
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"The freedom of one ends when the one of the other begins". If freedom comes free and free is something that has no limits how does freedom end?
I speak Portuguese. I disagree with you, we have a lot of freedom. Not only we are controlled by the technology we let ourselves be. Do your way, and you live in your own freedom. Portugal is a free country without war, with fair and justice.
Unfortunately, I can neither speak nor read Portuguese, so this work is just a collection of letters to me. However, I can run it through Google Translate, but I shall only be able to supply advice on the content, and not the language. (The grammar seems iffy, but that may be due to the translator, and not the author.)
I hope you don't mind, but I shall enspoiler the translated text below this paragraph, for reference. (Plus, others may want to have a general idea of what this means.)
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When slavery ended or the Portuguese put an end to the Philippine Dynasty, there were those who thought he had found freedom, but no more than an illusion of this. Because when leaving an oppression we submit ourselves to another prison. For we who put the laws that prevent us from making desired actions.
There's nothing more we want than to acquire freedom, but as we have if we can be controlled by an evil genius or subject to the laws of nature? As much as we may walk only we reach half the target path.
As time goes on we turn more objective. Because man submitted to its characteristics, the only being who has the rational concept won land and imposed governments, we let the nomadic to be citizens.
I sincerely pity to live in this time, where have acquired much knowledge of the world and omit us the truth. Where are controlled by social networks and technology. Which connects us all but treat them as numbers, like chess pieces for we grant benefits to their ambitions. Where we think that life is based on studying things that man has created, in learning to live in the world that human imposed, working with jobs that give us laws, to earn what is necessary for our own survival.
Ignorance is what we really want to have an element because it prevents us from knowing what is really freedom because so really we shall find that we are free, but only so we come to the closer we get freedom.
And here is the Portuguese review, also for reference.
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The literature of this text was good. I have no comment on that. But remember where you live.
All right. Well, "freedom" has different meanings to different people. It could refer to the state of actually being free, as in not enslaved, but many believe that it refers to something more than that. After all, one can be a slave one's circumstances, to one's job, etc.
When we look at things that way, yes, we are being controlled by laws, but that's the whole purpose of having laws in the first place. They are there to provide us with the life we currently have. Imagine a world without laws, a world where people are free to do whatever they want. I don't know about you, but I imagine a world of fire and chaos, where crime runs rampant and injustice prevails.
A world that enjoys peace without laws can only exist in our imagination - the actions of humans as a race have proved that. However, as individuals, we have the power to free ourselves and rise above our circumstances. It will not be easy, since nothing of value ever comes without effort, but it is possible.
If you feel oppressed, do something about. Revolutions don't occur by themselves - they occurred because people wanted a change and were willing to make it happen themselves. But if you look closer, you will see there are always those individuals who made the first step.
Be the person to make that first step in your own life. If you wait for someone else to do it, you will be waiting for a long time to come...
Lovely little composition you have here! I do feel you could have expressed it better in a poem or as the theme of a short story, because when you have it written out like this it seems somewhat boring, almost.

I'm not going to go into grammar because I suspect a lot is lost in translation.
I don't particularly agree or disagree with your views on this subject but they are certainly interesting.
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Eu falo português. Discordo contigo, nós temos muita liberdade. Não só somos controladas pela tecnologia se nos deixamos ser. Faz o teu caminho, e vives na tua liberdade própria. Portugal é um país livre sem guerra, com direitos justos e justiça.
A literatura deste texto estava bom. Não tenho nenhum comentário sobre isso. Mas lembra-te onde vives.
-Lau.
This is portuguese.