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Re: Asleep, or Dead?
Hi there! This poem is so beautiful and so sad! I love the way you wrote this, I truly do. I understand what you are going through, and what you ...
Dec 27, 2018 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (13.2)
Hi there! Another interesting chapter!! I am definitely hooked and can't wait for more! There is only one sentence that needs some work, and that is this one: " reaching ...
Dec 27, 2018 -
Re: Lost, or Alone?
I love this! This hits me personally, as I have often felt this, but could never seem to put it into words. Everyone has a place though, and I know ...
Dec 24, 2018 -
Re: October 25
This hit me so hard! If I could, I would give you a hug. I know how you feel, and this poem...I'm crying for you. I hope I can help ...
Dec 22, 2018 -
Re: I gotta go!
Hi there. Okay, first off, I am shaking with laughter!! This is a great success! I just read it to my mom and we are both laughing! This isn't going ...
Dec 21, 2018 -
Re: This Christmas......
Amazing and beautiful! This speaks right to the heart of the reader, and it definitely hit me. I'm sorry you feel this way, and I hope with all my being ...
Dec 21, 2018 -
Re: The Mask
So beautiful and so true! I have been through this before, and believe me, it is possible to break free. I just want you to know that you can PM ...
Dec 21, 2018 -
Re: Night time Fears
Hi there! I am going to jump right into this review! So, first off, this is a good poem, and very relatable. I am sorry you go through this, I ...
Dec 21, 2018 -
Re: Shakespearean Insult Letter
I love this! I get the feeling that you love Shakespeare as much as I do! XD. I read it and watch it and listen to it daily. I love ...
Dec 20, 2018 -
Re: malnourished hallucinations.
Hi there and welcome to YWS!! I hope you enjoy it here! So this is interesting, and very true. I don't have anything to offer, because to me, you did ...
Dec 20, 2018 -
Re: The Lost Dragon 10.3
*screams* This is awesome!! I don't have any suggestions or sentences to point out because I didn't notice any. Nice cliffhanger though! So, Clandestine has found Matt, but so has ...
Dec 20, 2018 -
Re: The Lost Dragon 10.2
Hi there! Another interesting chapter! :). I really hope she finds Matt, because I really want to see who he really is! Now I just found a few sentences that ...
Dec 20, 2018 -
Re: Life or Death Chapter 3 Report
Hi there! Another great chapter! I have only a few pointers and then I'll be out! First: "He bowed his head in respect his horns catching the light of the ...
Dec 16, 2018 -
Re: Rain
Hello! Very interesting! I think that this story is actually really, really good! I do think that it could use a little more content in the first part, a little ...
Dec 14, 2018 -
Re: A Song of Songs
Hi there! This is really, really good! The only thing I would change is when you say "Angelic wing" I would say "Wings." To me, it fits better with the ...
Dec 14, 2018
