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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: War in the sky.

    Ok so this poem had AWESOME imagery. As you took me through the lines, a picture formed in my head. From the words you used, like bursting, cracked and creaked, ...

    Nov 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Technology, Dramatic Re: My Father, the Inventor

    I really enjoyed this. It has a lot of symbols and different imagery in it, which made me think while reading. That's the best type of poetry for me, because ...

    Nov 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: Another Dead Man Walking

    That was really deep and nice to read. I really enjoyed it! Some suggestions - or a sound I feel like you should elaborate on this line, or get rid ...

    Nov 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Romantic Re: Secrets of a Teenage Girl

    Few things I noticed going through - She's hopelessly in love with him, but she feels as if he doesn't even notice her. - I think the 'even' isn't necessary. ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Simple Truths

    This was really enjoyable to read! It made me think, and I love poetry that does that. One thing I loved was your rhyming scheme. It flowed so well, even ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Fireflies

    Aw this was a very nice read. It brightened up my day :) I love how you drew the connection between the lighting bugs and fireworks. I've never thought of ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Other Re: Poem: A World Full of Fantasy

    This is really well written, and a joy to read! I loved how you put all the imagery into this, it clearly painted a picture in my mind. I absolutely ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Poetry » Health, Realistic Re: 1

    Nitpicks first! When you see her She looks perfectly normal. Little do you know She struggles day in And day out with a disease. I would add a comma after ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Say Something

    This was awesome! Dark and meaningful, my favorite :) Just a few nitpicks I saw- Sitting here alongside you in this gloomy room, the frigid air settles like clouds, drifting ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: Description/Chapter 1

    Hello there! I'll start off with some grammar and nitpicky stuff. At the beginning, I think you should narrow down the spacing just a bit. I like how you have ...

    Jul 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Amaya Wright: Guardian of the Sea [Prologue]

    Very nice prologue! It definitely leaves the reader with a sense of mystery, and want to read more. So here are just a few things I saw. As I began ...

    Jul 2, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Lament

    Wowzers. I have attempted to write what I just read, and it's never been that amazing, nor has it perfectly described the way I sometimes feel. Very well done on ...

    Jul 2, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: A Sunset

    Aw, this was super sweet! It made me smile :) So here's just a few things I saw. There wasn't many, but this is what I noticed. "You can't leave ...

    Jul 1, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: Father To Daughter (Please Forgive Me)

    Hey there! So this was an interesting poem, something I haven't seen before. I liked that new perspective it gave me. I also felt like I went on the emotional ...

    Jun 18, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: She, Me. You, I.

    Wow, I really really enjoyed this. I read it like three times! Very good. I feel like it's really deep, and can be interpreted in many different ways. For me, ...

    Jun 18, 2014


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