ExOmelas

Nope, sometimes you can't read one more green room poem. Sometimes you just need to review something that's beyond the rawest of first drafts. Hello, MissGangamash, I am here to ...

Awww, I really like this ^.^ I like the way you've got a love poem from the POV of a character rather than just yourself. Or at least, that's what ...

Hey there, The concept for this was fine, but I think you could make some changes to your execution. It's not an easy thing to define poetry, so I'm not ...

Hi there, nit-picks first: And praised Lio. This is a little unclear. Did Haka praise Lio, or is this an exclamation, like "praise the lord". He didn’t need to, but ...

Hey there, I think the main issue with this is clarity. Like, individually your lines are good and have emotional potential, but I'm struggling to connect them all together to ...

Hi there, welcome to the site! Sorry if that sounded too enthusiastic for the subject matter. Before I start, I want you to know that even though I'm going to ...

Hey, I've been spending my day doing green room reviews, and this is the first one I've given a like to, so props for that :P Unfortunately, that makes it ...

Hello fellow Whovian! Nit-picks first: I had just been washing dishes and had nearly missed the call by drying my hands with a towel on the opposite side of the ...

Hi there, So, first of all, this is an interesting way to start a story. Honestly, it feels more like a poem than a prologue, but I guess it could ...

Hey, I'm still getting used to poetry reviews so apologies for how unstructured this review is: I'm not really that keen on your final stanza. It seems a bit generic, ...

My first thought here is that the flow is pretty good. The bad, the good, then the contradiction. Pretty standard, but very effective. A change to make in terms of ...

My words is a speck of dirt to all of Earth. "is" should probably be "are". The first thing I can think of here is an opportunity you could use. ...

Flow: Pretty much fine. A couple of places like in the second stanza's last three lines the line length is a bit off. I think this can be fixed in ...

Okay so first of all I really don't think this is an essay. Just putting a couple of quotes into a piece doesn't make this an essay. If it's anything, ...

Flow: First three lines flow very well. Sort of even sounds like a rule-of-three, which is very good. The next three lines are alright too. "Who has risen against the ...