ExOmelas

Woot - green room review! Nit-picks and nice moments: I put another pot of coffee on and pulled half a rotisserie chicken I’d only picked at on the kitchen island ...

Hiya, I saw the other two parts of this still in the Green Room so I'm going to review this then those two. Nit-picks and nice moments: After I got ...

Woot! I get to capture a chapter before it leaves the green room :D Nit-picks and nice moments: This sentence froze the entire ward, Jane gazed up at Fox, her ...

Almost caught up... Nit-picks: A positive thing not a nit-pick per se

Just keep reviewing, just keep reviewing... He was now a small, weak, black baby dragon. ERMAGERD SO CUTE! I'm assuming that's your profile picture? Nit-picks: “He’s still our Dragon Noir.” ...

I'm going to leave the soliloquy for the moment. Sort of in chapter mode. Nit-picks: as his ears slowly returned to health That seems like a slightly odd way to ...

Reviews might be coming a teensy bit slower not that I have started watching the tennis hehe Nit-picks: She ran up to her at huge speed and knocked her off ...

Got so absorbed in the last chapter I forgot to turn on the tennis - you know how significant that is for me :P OOPS I READ THE AUTHOR'S NOTE ...

*runs around wildly reviewing* Nit-picks: Suddenly, the sleeves to his costume ripped off, revealing his scaly arms underneath. How did this happen? Did he do this? killings gradually became more, ...

Here I go again :) Nit-picks: In about an instant I would take out "about". It makes it seem less sudden. “Satan gave me a present for you.” He said. ...

Hi again, Nit-picks: door of the office. About half an hour later, Jane was finally inside the actual office. Repetition of office so quickly feels a bit clunky. However, a ...

Well, I caught up with that other novel much quicker than I expected. So here I am! Nit-picks: smashed the car window, before unlocking it and forcefully pulling the driver ...

Ooh I made it in time to get this one out the green room! (or help, at least) Nit-picks: “Ah, how are you, Curi-dear?” A ridiculously smug grin appeared on ...

Nearly there... Nit-picks: getting an attitude though Curi hadn't heard. Curi didn't hear the attitude? Then how did she know to relate it to us? Trailing her hand down the ...

Just keep reviewing, just keep reviewing... Nit-picks: instead something heavy hung in the air—an unknown tension. There should either be a comma before this or just make it a whole ...