EmmVeePi

I thought this was decent(I know 'dont sound so enthused' right?). I did really like in the last two lines of the first stanza how you used 'rust' and followed ...

Well this is pleasant and has some great imagery even if I disagree with you about winter(i loath the season). In line 14 you use the word "fir" in place ...

A really pretty piece to be sure. Congratulations on your ability to capture that everyday wonder that is a world viewed through the lens of a vary capable imagination. When ...

Hey there MVP here, ready to be of service in reviewing your poem I hope. Self Pity, I loath self pity, which makes excellent reading material. The introduction is nice, ...

Hey there Hangman, EmmVeePi here with a review. Well there is nothing wrong with this poem, but there is nothing great either, I dont mean to be mean but it ...

Okay Joy, EmmVeePi here with a review. My first impression is that the opening and closing are done masterfully. They are contrasting a bit but definitely parallels and make excellent ...

Emm here with a review and first of all what a lovely piece. It is both beautifully written as well as written about such wondrous heavenly bodies(I've always been enamored ...

An angry father is excellent subject matter I think as most have dealt with it from time to time(some worse than others of course.) The scene of a fight(or probably ...

I understand this is flash and you cant always fit everything in a piece of this sort but it seems we picked up in the middle of everything and the ...

I liked this very much. Not exactly a feel good story but thats okay. Lots of good descriptions in here. I liked the tear as she was rolled down the ...

Very good story. I really did enjoy it. I will say this though: Big and complicated sentences and big and complicated words can be beautiful but you use a lot ...

"I was not a Christen" *Christian. "the sun grew stronger and warm enough to rise from the day." this sounds funny to me, I am not sure if our character ...

"horizontal lines of the two different shades pathed the way" I don't think "pathed" is a word. Try paved maybe? Its obviously not paved but I think that would convey ...

First of all I wouldn't call this a short story, I don't know what I'd call it but its not a story as it has no plot. It is very ...

"Hard as nails and just is smooth" is great but that character has been done many times, you'll need to find something on top of that to make her stand ...