Father Mine

An angry father is excellent subject matter I think as most have dealt with it from time to time(some worse than others of course.) The scene of a fight(or probably more a one sided affair than fight I imagine) at what should have been a pleasant dinner makes for a subtle yet noticeable contrast.

Okay as far as criticism goes: I would recommend going back through and paying closer attention to punctuation or eliminate altogether, either choice is fine but the way it is its inconsistent for example in the second stanza there is no comma at the end of the first line then a comma on the next two and finally no period after the fourth line but periods are used at the end of stanzas 1, 3, 4, and 5.

Also I would advise you pay careful attention to the syllable counts in each line. I dont hold to such things as a hard rule(that the pattern of syllables must be followed 100% through the entire poem) but when completely disregarded can make for a clunky read(read it allowed and you should hear what I'm saying.)

Finally if it were my poem I would probably switch the the 4th and 5th verses as I think the second to last one carries more finality but that is more opinion than anything.

You've got a lot of good things working for you here and with a little spit polish could be quite the piece. Keep up the good work.

Hello!
I can see that you love English literature, am I right?
At least I do, and this poem reminds me of it a lot. (So that's a compliment.)
There are a few small things I noticed in your poem that bothered me a little while reading.
In the second stanza, you end the second line with "say" and the fourth with "place", a combination that is close to rhyming, but doesn't. It bothers me more than it should. The rest of your rhyming is fine.
Also, I was struggling with the rhythm of some of the lines. I don't know if poetry is your specialty, and if perhaps you did this on purpose, but the stanza's don't all have the same rhythm.
The first stanza is a little questionable, but okay. The second one is perfect.
The third one needs tiny changes, like "You have had your say" instead of "You've had your say" and "Oh dearest father mine" instead of "Dearest father mine". This way, the rhythm seems much better.

I hope this helps you a little, I must say I'm no expert at poetry, but I tried.

Hello!
This is indeed, a very, very emotional poem. I really loved the idea of it, and not once did I think your rhythm was broken up. Great job! I only have a couple of nitpicks...

"Now do not tell me you know better
For even you are not perfect."

For some reason I catch myself pausing after perfect. Maybe there should be a period there. Maybe...

The other thing I found was capitalization. You capitalized every word at the beginning of a line, which technically in poetry I don't think that's wrong. Personally though, I think it might be a little bit distracting to the readers. Maybe. Probably not, but maybe.
Other than that, this was awesome. Very well written. Great job, and keep writing!
~Snazzy
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