Emerson

You're young, so you're new to poetry. This doesn't really give me anything. I suggest you read poetry, and books on poetry. Read poems on the site and look at ...

I'm sure Colly said a lot of marvelous things. Listen to her, lol. The title strikes me odd. Save Our Ship. But I think you chose it for the alliterations ...

I haven't read over Colly's critique, but she is brilliant and I'm sure she gave a lot of good advice. I liked this, but it seemed lacking. It was pretty, ...

[Though on a slightly more serious note - I think there's a pre-thirteen limit on the registration...?] You can send in parent permission forms, although whether he/she did this I ...

Whence critiqued... I didn't read it, but hey, he says good things. Listen to him. As for what I have to say! [I also say good things.] They rhyming was ...

I'm going to skip all the grammar, capitalization, punctuation, etc. Everyone else has told you you need to fix that ^_~ But I'll probably end up repeating Snoink, only with ...

Her dad was the president of the United States so of course she was treated like a Queen and she wasn’t going to disapprove of the royal service. Telling. It's ...

Chandni comment on some punctuation. I certainly think you could go through and clean up the punctuation, at least a bit. There didn't seem much in it, I didn't feel ...

This poem does need to show a lot more emotion, and in places the rhyming is really forced. A date is a date. Ill never be late. Or make you ...

Er, uh. Childish? Yes. That's the best fitting word. If you wanted for something more serious [or, jokingly serious] give it a rhythm, that'll put it more into place. Then ...

You used a very simple rhyme theme, which Fand once called Bubblegum rhyming, because its so simple. Any one could come up with those rhymes. You have no rhythm, either ...

I find the sheet being a character mystifying, and as par, I'm somewhat confused :lol: But some parts I understood, and enjoyed. You have some errors - but you're a ...

I'm not entirely sure what to say of this poem. It didn't have a specific structure, or scheme of any kind, and what ever you were writing about I couldn't ...

Oh, vampires. My first love... I actually wrote a vampire novel for my NaNoWriMo '06. I'm still unsure whether I'll ever edit it. You admitted the beginning was a lot ...

Honestly, I can't make any sense of it. I think it should be something good, it does sound poetic but... I get confused by the first line, think of a ...