I agree that the rhyme is simple and the last line of your first stanza feels really forced. It doesn't quite fit with the rest and I think you've put it in just to fit the rhyme scheme. Here are a few specific suggestons, mostly concerning punctuation -
A pen collides with the bare paper, [This line doesn't quite work. Perhaps 'Pen strokes carress pristine paper']
Staining it with black ink, [Maybe this would sound better as 'leaving stains of black ink' and it needs to end in a period.]
It is only moments later, [A half-rhyme already? Half rhymes often don't work in a poem with a regular structure and you could easily use 'caper' or even 'vapour' is a better half rhyme. Spelt as 'vapor' if you're American I think...
That you are left to think,
The words on the page seem so true,
Yet equally an imitation,
None of them revealing a clue,
Or giving a final explanation [This line has a syllable too many. Perhaps 'or giving final explanation' and you need a period again.
The last line leaves you reeling, [No need for a comma here.]
In anticipation of a conclusion, [Either a semi colon or period here and the line is much too long. Maybe 'You anticipate conclusion' would work?]
The things that you are feeling,
Are all parts of the illusion.
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